Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Television advertising directed toward young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Advertisement is main factor which motivate us to buy products. Some of people agree that television advertisement directing towards young children good, others disagree. In my view, Television advertising should not be directed towards young children for following two reasons.
First, the young children are not capable of buying product by themselves. They have to convince their parents to buy product for them. Children may show advertiisement on television to his parents. As the advertisement is directed towards young children, parents might not be able to understand the need of product . For instance, when I was a child I used to watch lot of cartoons. One of my favoritr cartoon was Beyblade. In that cartoon, characters in a cartoon used beyblades. Aftee cartoon, television channel used to do advertising directing towards children like me. Once, I asked my parents to buy it for me. They refused my request saying it is not useful, they told me there is nothing special in it. So, as my parents did not see requirement of beyblade for me which they might have baught if the advertisement were more mature for usefulness of product.
Second, young children get easily motivated by advertisement which might be not healthy for them.For example, during my school days television used to show adverisement of drinking soda directing towards young children. I used to force my parents to buy it. They knew it was bad, but they used buy because of constant annoyance to them. This soda drink lured me to buy it. After many years of drinking the soda, I gained weight. In my adulthood, I realised my mistake to attracted towards a drink.
In conclusion, advertisement should not drected towards children as young children are not going to pay money for a product as well as children easily get motivated to buy product which might be not be good for their health.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, second, so, well, for example, for instance, in conclusion, in fact, as well as, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 1.0 13.8261648746 7% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1562.0 1977.66487455 79% => OK
No of words: 314.0 407.700716846 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.97452229299 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20951839842 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86611290332 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 152.0 212.727598566 71% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.484076433121 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 471.6 618.680645161 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 52.0269858462 48.9658058833 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 74.380952381 100.406767564 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.9523809524 20.6045352989 73% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.33333333333 5.45110844103 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.22003000572 0.236089414692 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.080301986268 0.076458572812 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.105646802659 0.0737576698707 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.191137818911 0.150856017488 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.109283856767 0.0645574589148 169% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 11.7677419355 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 65.73 58.1214874552 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.95 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.35 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 86.8835125448 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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