A pet food company recalled 4 million pounds of pet food in response to complaints that pets that had consumed the food experienced vomiting, lethargy, and other signs of illness. After the recall, the pet food company tested samples from the recalled food and determined that all chemicals found in the food were chemicals that are approved for use in pet food. Thus, the recalled food was not responsible for these symptoms, and the company should not devote further resources to the investigation.
A Pet food company did not have considered many aspects by which pets may experienced vomiting, lethargy and signs of illness. The response provided for stopping investigation is based on many assumptions.
A pet food company selling its product all over a country or globally,have they found the complaints are from which region?. There may be a case of certain kind of flu being spread in some states and from these states pet companies receiving a complaints regarding pet's health issues. So, pet food company should find out the region from where a complaints are received and is there some flu or virus spreading in their product selling region.
Pet's health depends on many factors such as amount of food given to a pet, surrounding of a pet and vaccination of pet. In response , it is mentioned about pet experiencing lethargy, it might due to more amount of food given to a pet. The pet might have not have vaccinated so, pet showing certain kind of illness. A pet company should verify previous medical report as well as amount of food given to a pet and surrounding condition of pet.
A pet company tested samples from a recalled pet food. As a company took a sample from large amount of pet food rises many questions regarding the food samples being taken from which food. A pet company should take sample from the food about which complaint is received. A pet company might have taken sample randomly, so it is not showing unapproved chemicals, there may case of unapproved chemicals were in one of the batch of food.
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Essay evaluation report
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 14 15
No. of Words: 271 350
No. of Characters: 1249 1500
No. of Different Words: 122 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.057 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.609 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.549 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 86 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 64 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 38 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 25 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.357 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.489 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.571 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.511 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.723 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.238 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 65, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ot have considered many aspects by which pets may experienced vomiting, lethargy ...
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Line 3, column 70, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , have
...s product all over a country or globally,have they found the complaints are from whic...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 243, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a complaint' or simply 'complaints'?
Suggestion: a complaint; complaints
...om these states pet companies receiving a complaints regarding pets health issues. So, pet f...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 345, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a complaint' or simply 'complaints'?
Suggestion: a complaint; complaints
...y should find out the region from where a complaints are received and is there some flu or v...
^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 132, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... pet and vaccination of pet. In response , it is mentioned about pet experiencing ...
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Line 5, column 259, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[2]
Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'had'.
Suggestion: had
... given to a pet. The pet might have not have vaccinated so, pet showing certain kind...
^^^^
Line 7, column 35, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[5]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'recalled pet food'.
Suggestion: recalled pet food
...t. A pet company tested samples from a recalled pet food. As a company took a sample from large ...
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Line 7, column 56, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...ested samples from a recalled pet food. As a company took a sample from large amou...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, may, regarding, so, well, kind of, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.6327345309 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 13.6137724551 37% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 7.0 28.8173652695 24% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 55.5748502994 68% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 16.3942115768 18% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1286.0 2260.96107784 57% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 270.0 441.139720559 61% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.76296296296 5.12650576532 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.05360046442 4.56307096286 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64529065877 2.78398813304 95% => OK
Unique words: 123.0 204.123752495 60% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.455555555556 0.468620217663 97% => OK
syllable_count: 392.4 705.55239521 56% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 19.7664670659 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.6119095982 57.8364921388 72% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.8571428571 119.503703932 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2857142857 23.324526521 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.14285714286 5.70786347227 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 8.0 5.25449101796 152% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.20758483034 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.626173225232 0.218282227539 287% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.320116650176 0.0743258471296 431% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.155388862704 0.0701772020484 221% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.41277528583 0.128457276422 321% => Maybe some contents are duplicated.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0997732563741 0.0628817314937 159% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 14.3799401198 74% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.3550499002 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 12.5979740519 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.56 8.32208582834 91% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 98.500998004 52% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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