Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Television advertising directed towards young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
To sell a product the businesses need to make their customers aware of the existance of the products and different types of advertisements are the way by which they can reach the customers. Here, the statement posits that the advertisement directed toward the young children of two to five years old should not be allowed on Television. I disagree with this statement and in the following paragraphs, I am going to explain my reasonings.
To begin with, not allowing businesses to advertise for a particular age group is not fair to the businesses. The children in the age limit that the statement is concerned about, remains strictly under the supervision of their parents most of the time. Moreover, it is their parents, who decide what will they eat, what will they do, what will be bought for them even what program they will watch. So, even if the children are exposed to such advertisement, as long as the parents not giving the permission, it is not possible for the children to buy anything. In such scenario, a company making product for such age group should not be shackled by any restrictions. For instance, in my childhood, a local toy company collaborated with a local toothpaste company. The toy company had a very popular action figure. Now, to boost the sales of toothpaste, the toothpaste company offered a free action figure with every purchase of the toothpaste. Though I wanted to have that action figure but due to my parents restriction I was not allowed to take advantage of that offer as my parents disagreed with my idea of we being in "dire" need of toothpaste. This way, although I knew about the product, but due to my restrictions I couldn't buy it. but, it boosted the sale of the toothpaste. This way, by the discretion of the parents, problems can be averted.
Moreover, there are many products made for that age group are consumed by the elders too. This way, restricitng television advertisement can hurt the revenue generated by a company. In this market of competition, this idea sounds obsolete. For instance, I like a particular chocolate very much. This product is specially made for the children of age group two to eight. Althought this product is made for the children, there were many adults like me who loved this product. I was actually introduced to this product by a television advertisement and then I bought it for my three years old niece. Now, If there was no advertisement in the television about this product i might not even be aware of its existence. In addition, there are other forms of advertisement that can reach the children like billboard advertisement which is shown in a large open space. What will be done about that? So, not allowing advertisement sounds like an half baked idea whatever the reson it might have.
In conclusion, there might be some harm in letting children of age two to five to watch television, but not letting the businesses to air advertisement does not sound like any solution. Moreover, strict parent supervision can easily solve the problem here along with being fair with the businesses in this competitive market. Thus, I stand by my position.
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- TOEFL T P O 43 - Integrated Writing Task 3
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Television advertising directed towards young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 70
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
...e product, but due to my restrictions I couldnt buy it. but, it boosted the sale of the...
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Message: Did you mean 'I'?
...nt in the television about this product i might not even be aware of its existenc...
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... not allowing advertisement sounds like an half baked idea whatever the reson it m...
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, if, moreover, so, then, thus, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 75.0 52.1666666667 144% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 8.0752688172 272% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2622.0 1977.66487455 133% => OK
No of words: 539.0 407.700716846 132% => OK
Chars per words: 4.86456400742 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.81833721656 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90340353139 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.43599257885 0.524837075471 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 820.8 618.680645161 133% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6003584229 141% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.8728388325 48.9658058833 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.4137931034 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5862068966 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.44827586207 5.45110844103 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.20556017345 0.236089414692 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0591785952552 0.076458572812 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.065067148953 0.0737576698707 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.157150889172 0.150856017488 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0625149657832 0.0645574589148 97% => OK
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.28 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 86.8835125448 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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