Governments should invest as much in the arts as they do in the military.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and suppor

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Governments should invest as much in the arts as they do in the military.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.

For a nation, self-defense is a very important aspect, for which every nation try to have a strong military. At the same time, to keep the people entertained, different form of arts plays a imoportant role. In this statement is is agrgued that goverment should spend as much for arts as they do for the military. Being self-sufficient in defense of the nation is one of the most important priority, government should focus more on military but should not left the arts completely, but the arts does not require the same amount of attention in current global situation.

A better military is always a matter of pride for a nation and gives a sense of security. We have seen many countries with large and strong military which emits their might. US military is one of the strongest military of the world and had the large amount of national budget allocated for them. Many radical research have came out from this investment from which we have been benefitted immensly. The wifi that we cannot live with out, the GPS that we use for navigation are some example of this. Also, many statistical theory has made its way to civilian use from the investment made for the research for the military during World War II.

Furthermore, as the saying goes, prevention is better than cure, having an updated military prevents many threats from attacking. If we consider the US military: they have versatile branches of military equiped with updated weapon technologies that the other countries don't want to interfare with their actions. At the same time US is target for many terrorist group which calls extra attention to the security of the country. Also, US military is playing a role to minimize the terrorist threat all over the world by helping other nations. This requires a lot of money and justifies the spending for them.

ALthough, one might argue that this is the era of diplomacy and arts forms are the soul food for mass people. So, that also requires similar amount of attention. Though this can be proved to be true to some extent but we have seen the diplomatic approaches to fail. A goverment cannot take chance in such matter of national security. But the goverment should also patron the arts sector to some extent to nuture young talents who enriches the culture of the nation.

As long as countries cannot resolve all their issues in a civil way, the need for the military will be there and to keep this required force updated investment need to be made. But the investment in arts forms and the military need not to be mutually exclusive. But considering the current global situation, The military demands more investment from the goverment.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 33.0505617978 94% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 58.6224719101 94% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 12.9106741573 139% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2206.0 2235.4752809 99% => OK
No of words: 458.0 442.535393258 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.81659388646 5.05705443957 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62611441266 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55941021576 2.79657885939 92% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 215.323595506 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.478165938865 0.4932671777 97% => OK
syllable_count: 698.4 704.065955056 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.5713234507 60.3974514979 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.9130434783 118.986275619 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9130434783 23.4991977007 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.30434782609 5.21951772744 25% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 12.0 7.80617977528 154% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 5.13820224719 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.156368590291 0.243740707755 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.051358033945 0.0831039109588 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0455106382196 0.0758088955206 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.094338961674 0.150359130593 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0459635535964 0.0667264976115 69% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 14.1392134831 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.8420337079 124% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 12.1639044944 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.75 8.38706741573 92% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 100.480337079 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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