Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Television advertising directed toward young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed.

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Television advertising directed toward young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed.

With the advent of television, advertising through TV shows is the best means for corporations to offer and introduce their products. So, it is common for us especially our innocent children to be bombarded by them. In this regard, some people think children-oriented television advertising should not be allowed to broadcast. I strongly agree with this statement for following reasons.
The first reason that immediately comes to mind is that children under the age of five lack the ability of understanding or judgment, so they are easily influenced by the outside world. Among the large audience, young children not only are more likely to believe what they see or hear in the advertising but also can't distinguish between what's real and what's not. This is because they aren't mature enough to realize the goals of the misleading advertising industry. Thus, advertisers send young children a message that you need these products to be happy and accepted. By doing so, children aged two to five desire to have what appeal to them. As a result, their parents would be forced to buy because they won't stop screaming, crying and even kicking regardless of whether their parents can fulfill children's unreasonable demands.
Another reason regarding this issue is that television advertising has a negative effect on the personality development of children. As we all know, their minds in early age are fresh, active and ready to absorb. Since children between two to five are vulnerable to what they watch or hear, parents must be vigilant and monitor their actions. As a tangible example, when unhealthy food including fast food was advertised, which may not especially design for young children, encourage them to have a bad eating habit that contributes significantly to an increase in the risk of obesity. Recent studies showed that over the past four years, consumption of foods eaten out has alarmingly risen among young children. It is noteworthy to mention that watching television advertising open a world of imagination and innovation for children because they are well-designed. We can ignore the advantages of television advertising when its disadvantages are taken into consideration.
All in all, I firmly believe that television advertising which permeates in every corner of our lives are not beneficial for the children to watch. Since it brings nothing but imposing a financial burden on parents and has a devastating effect on the children's mind by making them busy.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...see or hear in the advertising but also cant distinguish between whats real and what...
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Line 2, column 338, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: what's
...ising but also cant distinguish between whats real and whats not. This is because the...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: what's
...cant distinguish between whats real and whats not. This is because they arent mature ...
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Line 2, column 385, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: aren't
...eal and whats not. This is because they arent mature enough to realize the goals of t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, regarding, so, thus, well, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2088.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 402.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 5.19402985075 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47771567384 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9407488438 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.569651741294 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 646.2 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.4988094708 48.9658058833 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.894736842 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1578947368 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.42105263158 5.45110844103 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.313488339532 0.236089414692 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0972122555185 0.076458572812 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0582928310745 0.0737576698707 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.181524446154 0.150856017488 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0573969265802 0.0645574589148 89% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.82 10.9000537634 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.53 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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