Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.
People have dissimilar tastes for spending their free time. Following celebrities' news is a possible habit that some people choose. Some hold the view that following celebrities' news does not belong to the specific range of ages, while other think that this habit is not interesting for older, although teenagers are the main audience of celebrities news. I strongly agree with latter group opinion that teenagers are more eager to become inform about what have happened in celebrities' life.
First, teenagers look for role-model. In fact, most children choose their role model between celebrities. If someone selects a person as her idol, she becomes interested in all of her role hero's behavior, so she starts to follow the person's news. For instance, I really admired Shakira, who is a famous singer, dances when I was a teenager. I practiced her dance style couple of hours every day. I followed her news to become aware of the time that her latest video clip would be realized. I read all articles which were about Shakira and her interests. In addition, children look for a celebrity who is more famous in their school. Knowing about famous celebrities helps a child to enhance her friends’ attentions to herself. To shed light on my point, let's assume a child who has the latest information about the celebrities. Consequently, everyone in the school will know him as a source of news which helps him to become popular in school.
Second, the children lifestyle allows them to follow these type of news. As a matter of fact, the amount of free time that a child has gives her an opportunity to spend her time on these types of news. Following celebrities’ news is a time-consuming habit. Children do not have many responsibilities to limit them from spending their free time. However, older people have varieties of duties that lead them to choose their habit more logically. In other words, mature people consider benefits of their habit, which prevent them from showing interest in celebrities’ news. Moreover, children have a dream to become a celebrity one day, while older people know that this dream is not reachable for them, since they have already chosen the direction of their life. The dream of becoming famous person makes celebrities' news attractive for them.
In conclusion, I believe that the main audiences of celebrities' news are teenagers. Choosing role-model and amount of their free time are main reasons that make this type of news interesting for young people.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 71, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'celebrities'' or 'celebrity's'?
Suggestion: celebrities'; celebrity's
...for spending their free time. Following celebrities news is a possible habit that some peop...
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Line 1, column 167, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'celebrities'' or 'celebrity's'?
Suggestion: celebrities'; celebrity's
...oose. Some hold the view that following celebrities news does not belong to the specific ra...
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Line 1, column 433, Rule ID: EAGER_TO[1]
Message: With 'eager to', use the base form of the verb: 'become'.
Suggestion: become
...pinion that teenagers are more eager to become inform about what have happened in cele...
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Line 2, column 234, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
...s behavior, so she starts to follow the persons news. For instance, I really admired Sh...
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Line 2, column 491, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...er latest video clip would be realized. I read all articles which were about Shak...
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Line 2, column 648, Rule ID: FAMOUS_CELEBRITY[1]
Message: Use simply 'celebrities'.
Suggestion: celebrities
...e famous in their school. Knowing about famous celebrities helps a child to enhance her friends&ap...
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Discourse Markers used:
['consequently', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'look', 'moreover', 'really', 'second', 'so', 'while', 'for instance', 'in addition', 'in conclusion', 'in fact', 'as a matter of fact', 'in other words']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.283898305085 0.229887763892 123% => OK
Verbs: 0.16313559322 0.158761421928 103% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0699152542373 0.0866891130778 81% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0275423728814 0.046263068375 60% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0762711864407 0.0685040099705 111% => OK
Prepositions: 0.131355932203 0.118717715034 111% => OK
Participles: 0.0275423728814 0.0351676179071 78% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.75889666196 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0275423728814 0.0309702414327 89% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0783898305085 0.0887237588012 88% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.00423728813559 0.0209618222197 20% => Some modal verbs wanted.
WH_determiners: 0.021186440678 0.0139019557991 152% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2509.0 2387.08602151 105% => OK
No of words: 417.0 408.028673835 102% => OK
Chars per words: 6.01678657074 5.86048508987 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5189133491 4.48200974243 101% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.335731414868 0.338922669872 99% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.227817745803 0.251872472559 90% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.175059952038 0.174417080927 100% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.117505995204 0.112833075102 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75889666196 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.496402877698 0.524397521467 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 54.9313853288 59.2087087015 93% => OK
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6684587814 121% => OK
Sentence length: 16.68 20.5533526081 81% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.7225886062 48.84282405 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.36 120.699889404 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.68 20.5533526081 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.64 0.644075263715 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.54480286738 108% => OK
Readability: 39.4617745803 45.7405998639 86% => OK
Elegance: 1.65873015873 1.45489161554 114% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.305229677732 0.300154397459 102% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.119512300099 0.103427244359 116% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0809917948332 0.0752933317313 108% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.427703714895 0.497263757937 86% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.156080225519 0.151897553556 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100722433103 0.114077575197 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0559694567618 0.0781384742642 72% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.328453718128 0.336927656856 97% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0456035307397 0.067059652881 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.218235060688 0.210909579961 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0372864486063 0.0618886996521 60% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8870967742 109% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.86379928315 26% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.91756272401 224% => Less neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 12.0 8.42114695341 142% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 2.4623655914 41% => OK
Neutral topic words: 10.0 2.75985663082 362% => OK
Total topic words: 23.0 13.6433691756 169% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.