Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In today's world, being popular is an inevitable phenomenon that everyone presumably needs. Even though some sociologists claim that the idea of celebrities has the same value to younger people as it has to older ones, but, as for me, I would like to declare that it is more significant to the younger people in comparison with the older ones. There are two main reasons why I feel this way, which are going to be elaborated on in the following essay.
In the first place, younger people have more free times than older people, as a wise person once said, "The more older you get, the more busy you will be." Consequently, younger groups of people probably are more in touch with celebrities due to the fact that they want something for their free time to enjoy it. With respect to the sociology research, as a case in point, accomplished in the University of British Columbia on June 5, 2007, it can be distinctly understood that in Toronto, the ratio of having free time for younger people to the older ones is 2.89. Thus, it is transparent that younger people are freer than the elderly.
There is also the fact that due the complexity of life, older people are not passionately inclined towards celebrities. On the other hand, it is true that younger people, because of their age and responsibilities, experience less complexity in their life, unless there is an exception. An experience in my own life can be an appropriate example to illustrate the point. My older brother, John, who is 38 years old now, is always telling me that had he a second chance to come back to his childhood, he would definitely pay more attention to the famous singers and dancers of the United States, because his life is so complicated now that he even cannot watch television more than three times a week. Therefore, this example clearly demonstrates the point.
So what are we to conclude? If taking into account all the factors mentioned in the article, is not it crystal clear that the argued point is more important to the younger people than older ones? Notwithstanding some other sociologists insisting on to be disapproved of the idea, personally, for me, it is more likely for the former point of view to be of more value.
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'consequently', 'first', 'if', 'second', 'so', 'therefore', 'thus', 'as for', 'as to', 'i feel', 'it is true', 'with respect to', 'in the first place', 'on the other hand']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.205882352941 0.229887763892 90% => OK
Verbs: 0.131221719457 0.158761421928 83% => OK
Adjectives: 0.122171945701 0.0866891130778 141% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0565610859729 0.046263068375 122% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0610859728507 0.0685040099705 89% => OK
Prepositions: 0.133484162896 0.118717715034 112% => OK
Participles: 0.0248868778281 0.0351676179071 71% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.72777734259 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0384615384615 0.0309702414327 124% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00188951952338 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0882352941176 0.0887237588012 99% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0135746606335 0.0209618222197 65% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00904977375566 0.0139019557991 65% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2247.0 2387.08602151 94% => OK
No of words: 390.0 408.028673835 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.76153846154 5.86048508987 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44391917772 4.48200974243 99% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.292307692308 0.338922669872 86% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.210256410256 0.251872472559 83% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.138461538462 0.174417080927 79% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.117948717949 0.112833075102 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72777734259 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.523076923077 0.524397521467 100% => OK
Word variations: 57.8599613862 59.2087087015 98% => OK
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6684587814 68% => OK
Sentence length: 27.8571428571 20.5533526081 136% => OK
Sentence length SD: 93.7438977606 48.84282405 192% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 160.5 120.699889404 133% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.8571428571 20.5533526081 136% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.14285714286 0.644075263715 177% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.5376344086 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.54480286738 90% => OK
Readability: 48.8827838828 45.7405998639 107% => OK
Elegance: 1.46363636364 1.45489161554 101% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.415367138107 0.300154397459 138% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.12039256772 0.103427244359 116% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0896750984956 0.0752933317313 119% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.556164629486 0.497263757937 112% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.201848074544 0.151897553556 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.183704094287 0.114077575197 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0965556637729 0.0781384742642 124% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.478802640975 0.336927656856 142% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.052519427126 0.067059652881 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.319895055173 0.210909579961 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0471039943019 0.0618886996521 76% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8870967742 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.86379928315 52% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.91756272401 61% => OK
Positive topic words: 6.0 8.42114695341 71% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 2.4623655914 81% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 2.75985663082 72% => OK
Total topic words: 10.0 13.6433691756 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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