Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Younger people are easily influenced by others such as their friends, their families or celebrities. They are surrounded by the social environment which emphasizes interaction with others. Therefore, in my opinion, I agree with the statement that the opinions of celebrities are more important to younger people than they are to older people.
First of all, rather than old people, younger people pay more attention to celebrities. With the advanced technology, younger people nowadays spend much time on the internet and their cell phones. These high technologies provide younger people the access to contact with the celebrities who always show on the TV or YouTube. Therefore, the longer they spend on the internet the more attention they focus on these celebrities. The opinions are more easily to reach those younger people who involved in the internet than that of older people.
Secondly, celebrities are the role model for younger people. People who can become celebrities all have special talent or are the best on their field. Therefore, their opinion will definitely become the gold role for younger people who have the same interests. For example, my boyfriend really like music. He follows a lot of famous DJ who sometimes share their opinion on how to collect different type of music or the way how they practice. Depend on these opinions, he really improve his skills a lot and become a DJ, too.
Last but not least, famous people are the standard for young people. Rather than older people, celebrities are successful people so that younger people may think that their opinion is the way to close to success. Take famous athletes for instance, younger athlete will follow those famous players' practice rules and process in order to reach the better level. They also may have a diet what great players do in order to keep a great fit. These opinions of celebrities make the younger people better.
In conclusion, younger people are easily influenced by people who have great success such as celebrities. Celebrities are more attractive than older people for younger people. They are also the role model and standard for those who is young. Therefore, their opinions are more important to younger people.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 479, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[3]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'improves'.
Suggestion: improves
...ce. Depend on these opinions, he really improve his skills a lot and become a DJ, too. ...
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Line 7, column 95, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... young people. Rather than older people, celebrities are successful people so tha...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, really, second, secondly, so, therefore, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 52.1666666667 71% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1866.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 365.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.11232876712 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37092360658 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55208089752 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 212.727598566 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.432876712329 0.524837075471 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 579.6 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.0949348557 48.9658058833 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.1304347826 100.406767564 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.8695652174 20.6045352989 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.34782608696 5.45110844103 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.341770869531 0.236089414692 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.123731311981 0.076458572812 162% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0951925943298 0.0737576698707 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.243292328337 0.150856017488 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0873106196688 0.0645574589148 135% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 11.7677419355 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.06 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.32 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 86.8835125448 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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