Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It goes without saying that in our progressively growing world and modern pluralistic society the role of celebrities in a wide variety of people's lives is undeniable. While some people assume that the younger generation is not keen on famous people and their attitudes, others stand the other side of the continuum, believing that younger people broadly affected from the role of celebrities in the society. Personally speaking, I would side with the latter. The reasons to support my viewpoint elaborated in the following paragraphs.
First and foremost, with the emergence of technological advances such as the TV program and specifically the indisputable role of the internet as well as the using of the broad spectrum of social media by famous people, their thought can easily permeate to the ordinary people including the younger generation. To be more specific, the role of social media in the process of spreading celebrities' ideas is inevitable. For instance, in my country, every single person who gains a sense of fame in the society promptly goes to establish a bunch of social media such as telegram channels, Instagram accounts, Facebook and so on to name just a few. Therefore, as far as their target potential audiences in most cases are the younger generation, they have the best chance to impose their ideas and thoughts to these people and consequently make a lot of new fans for them to follow. Besides, it could also be a strategy in the business area. To put it in a vivid picture, the combination of the famous people and the advantages of new technology such as social media has brought so many opportunities for business owners and celebrities to present their products to young people.
Another noteworthy reason relies on the lack of experience and knowledge of young people to accept persuasive thought so quickly to compare with the older experienced people. In other words, the younger generation is always regarded as naive even though they are against this notion. Therefore, the more a person is inexperienced, the easy he will be influenced by the idea of famous people through their remarkable attempts to conceive their followers. My personal experience serves as a typical example. When I was a teenager, one of my desire was to become a musician even I did not have any basic knowledge or any practical experience. I was extremely fascinated with one of the famous Iranian musicians in those days. However, soon I realized that there is a long road ahead to be a well-known musician then I reconsider this idea impractical for myself. The most valuable lesson of this occurrence in my personality is that the inclination of these thought-provoking external attractions would reveal how unnecessary they are.
In conclusion, having the reasons and the points above-mentioned into account, I do believe that there are a couple of major factors such as the lack of experience and the role of technological breakthrough which make the younger people to appeal for the persuasive ideas of celebrities.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, consequently, first, however, if, so, then, therefore, well, while, as to, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as well as, in most cases, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 72.0 52.1666666667 138% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2536.0 1977.66487455 128% => OK
No of words: 502.0 407.700716846 123% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05179282869 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7334296765 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99774257273 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 256.0 212.727598566 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.509960159363 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 818.1 618.680645161 132% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 77.9840171138 48.9658058833 159% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.473684211 100.406767564 133% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.4210526316 20.6045352989 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.89473684211 5.45110844103 163% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.198319946684 0.236089414692 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0578278431923 0.076458572812 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0466574393903 0.0737576698707 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123810532599 0.150856017488 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0126651887464 0.0645574589148 20% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.6 11.7677419355 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 58.1214874552 78% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.31 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.14 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 134.0 86.8835125448 154% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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