Some parent offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school Do you think this is a good idea? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays, learning and studying activities of school-age children are a vital matter for the parents. They want their children to be successful in their academic activities, and after that, they can have great opportunities in their future Job. To reach this success, the children should have a high grade on their courses, and it can be accomplished by the parents' encouragement, such as offering money for each high grade. It is crystal clear that this process can be successful, and in what follows, I will substantiate my reasons.
Firstly, the parents can encourage their children to get the best grade by offering money for each high grade that they get in their school. By doing this, after some weeks or months, reaching a high score in school alter to a habit for the children. For example, When I was a ten-year-old child, I was in the third elementary class. My parents promised me to give two dollars for each top grade in the class. I started to get the best score between my classmates, and after three times that I got money from my father, I forgot to get cash as a reward from him because it changed to a habit the be best and top student on the class for me. I was competing with other students for being the best, not for getting money. Now, it has had more impact on my opinion about learning and studying courses to get a high grade. Thus, if my parents did not encourage me by giving a reward for being the best student, it could not be possible for me to be a top student.
Secondly, the parents could instruct their children that they need hard working to have sufficient income in their life. For instance, when a person tries to get money by being a top student in school, this person will have reasonable effort to earn money in his future work. To achieve this, he will try being the best in his work, and this cause to promote the level of a community such as in technology. Therefore, the parents can appropriately do their due in society just by offering their children money for their high grade.
All in all, by getting money to children for each high grade, not only the parents encourage their children to be the best student in school, but they also lear them to have sufficient income in their life by hard working.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 359, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'parents'' or 'parent's'?
Suggestion: parents'; parent's
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Line 3, column 593, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, third, thus, for example, for instance, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1855.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 409.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.53545232274 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49708221141 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49216345794 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.437652811736 0.524837075471 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 549.9 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.8378579024 48.9658058833 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.117647059 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0588235294 20.6045352989 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.52941176471 5.45110844103 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.376408874969 0.236089414692 159% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.154904090325 0.076458572812 203% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.110941360045 0.0737576698707 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.27703758037 0.150856017488 184% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00600673386238 0.0645574589148 9% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 72.5 58.1214874552 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.35 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.26 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 86.8835125448 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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