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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support. Use specific reasons and examples to support your an
Nowadays, there are several activities that the students can carry out them at the universities and colleges. They can perform social activities and paly some sports beside their studies. Whereas some people declare that the students must pay more attention for their classes than other activities, I strongly agree with this matter. I believe that they should have enough time to do social activities and play sports. In the following, I will try to substantiate my perspective by giving reasons and examples.
Firstly, youth can carry out social activities and sports in their free time at the college such as rehearsal, play soccer, painting exhibition and so forth. Performing this activities, they can express their potential at the other skills. For example, when I was a student at an elementary school, I play soccer at the sport class. After two session and having enough time for playing in the every position of field, I realized that it is best for me to play as a goalkeeper for my school football team. Thus, I decided to be a goalkeeper and have best save so that I was selected as a goalkeeper for my school soccer team, and it gave me a self-confidence that I could be best choice in every things that I was professional. Therefore, if there were not enough opportunity, that was not possible for me to find my skill at goalkeeping.
Secondly, the university and colleges should hold social activities to prevent students to be engaged in the destructive works. These activities can be tricky for them, and they might be distracted from their main aim. For example, my brother was a student at a low ranked university when he was 20 years old. He and his friend had a lot of free time at the university, and the university staff did not define any additional class or activity for their free time. So, one of my brother's friends had suggested him to smoke at the free time and had given him a cigarette. After it happened, my brother got accustomed to it, and he could not get rid of it yet. Therefore, being hold social activities at the students' free time at the university and college leads them to be prevented from harmful events.
In conclusion, chairmans at the universities and colleges must pay more attention for students' free time around the campus. Not only does it cause to prevent students from doing harmful things, it leads to engage them in their favorite activities that it brings about realizing their talents.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 170, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...ing exhibition and so forth. Performing this activities, they can express their pote...
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Line 3, column 344, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'session' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'sessions'.
Suggestion: sessions
...ay soccer at the sport class. After two session and having enough time for playing in t...
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Line 3, column 672, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[4]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'be the best'.
Suggestion: be the best
... gave me a self-confidence that I could be best choice in every things that I was profe...
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Line 7, column 148, Rule ID: ALLOW_TO[1]
Message: Did you mean 'preventing'? Or maybe you should add a pronoun? In active voice, 'cause' + 'to' takes an object, usually a pronoun.
Suggestion: preventing
...ound the campus. Not only does it cause to prevent students from doing harmful things, it ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, whereas, for example, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 62.0 43.0788530466 144% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2032.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 424.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.79245283019 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53775939005 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73534478111 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 212.727598566 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.47641509434 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 624.6 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.6651032124 48.9658058833 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.6 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.15 5.45110844103 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.140929714419 0.236089414692 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0570384658401 0.076458572812 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0415856187485 0.0737576698707 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.100273225762 0.150856017488 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0495436286879 0.0645574589148 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.5 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.28 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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