Some parent offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school Do you think this is a good idea? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It is essential for parents to provide some prizes for their children when they achieve any academic achievement. Children then can inspire themselves and work harder in school. However, is money a good form of prizes? It is true that money can also use to inspire, children, but it can also cause harm to the children in a lot of ways. Parents should only offer their children selected goods, rather than offer money directly.
I will begin by express my appreciation on offering prizes for school-age children. Schoolwork can be stressful. Homework, Presentations, not even mention the never-ending series of lectures. Early School-age children are especially valuable to those stress because they are not yet recognizing the importance of learning in school. Eventually, they have less motive to focus entirely on study. However, school-age children usually do take an interest on latest toys and fancy gears, they will work hard to try to get them. By tie those prizes with their grade, parent can provide a strong motivation their children to work hard in their school. Better yet, phycology study have proved that children get praise from their parents have more chance to success and less stressful in school.
However, why does money cannot be a good form of prizes. Material good can help children to motive children to achieve a better grade but using money as prize directly may let them build a harmful habits. School-age children neither have the experience nor the ability to manage money. When they receive some money, they will likely to spend those money on something that might not be entirely beneficial. Wroth yet, if the there are several bad kids in school, they might even spend that money on harmful objects such as smoking or go an internet gaming cafe. A better solution is parents can take their children to a store, and let their children pick up a product. It is of great significance that the parent inspects the product to ensure that they are both beneficial and can give inspiration to their children. For instance, a book or science kit toy is a better candidate for such gifts, since they are both fun and provide a learning experience.
To Sum up, it is indeed a good method to motivate a child with certain prizes. However, money is not a good option. Parents should be more careful about what prize they give to their child, in order to maximize their children's learning experience.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 251, Rule ID: USE_TO_VERB[1]
Message: Did you mean 'used'?
Suggestion: used
... prizes? It is true that money can also use to inspire, children, but it can also c...
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Line 3, column 198, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'habit'?
Suggestion: habit
...e directly may let them build a harmful habits. School-age children neither have the e...
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Line 3, column 343, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this money' or 'those moneys', 'those monies'?
Suggestion: this money; those moneys; those monies
...e some money, they will likely to spend those money on something that might not be entirely...
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Line 5, column 237, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to experience'
Suggestion: to experience
...er to maximize their childrens learning experience.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, so, then, for instance, such as, it is true, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2015.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 411.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90267639903 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50256981431 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55279731145 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 207.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.503649635036 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 617.4 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 37.9190475443 48.9658058833 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.9583333333 100.406767564 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.125 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.45833333333 5.45110844103 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.358226515688 0.236089414692 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112061944293 0.076458572812 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0577197567343 0.0737576698707 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.23950852485 0.150856017488 159% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0612584204364 0.0645574589148 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 11.7677419355 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.84 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.67 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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