Some parent offer their school-age children money for each high grade (mark) they get in school Do you think this is a good idea?Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays, learning and studying activities of school-age childeren are an important issue for the parents. They want their childeren be successful on their academic activities, and after that, they can have good opportunities to their future Job. To reach this success, the children should have high garde on their courses, and it can be accomplished by the parents encouragement such as offer money for each high grade. It is crystal clear that this process can be successful, and in what following, I will substantiate my reasons.
Firstly, the parents can encourage their children to gat best grade by offering money for each high grade that they get in their school. By doing this, after some weeks or months, getting high grade in school alter to a habit for the children. For example, When I was ten-year old child, I was in the third elementary class. My parents promised me to give two dollar for each top grade on the class. I started to get best score in class, and after three times that I got money from my father, I forgot to get money from him bacause it changed to a habit the be best and top student on the class for me. I was competing with other students for being top student of class, not for getting money. Now, it has had more impact on my opinion about learning and studying courses to get high grade. Thus, if my parents did not encourage me be giving money for being best player, it could not be possible for me to be top student.
Secondly, the parents could learn their children that they need hard working to have sufficient income in their life. For instance, when a person try to get money by being top student in school, this person will have good effort to earn money in his future work. To achieve this, he will try being best in his work, and this cause to promote level of community such as in technology. Therefore, the parents can appropriately do their due in the community just by offering their children money for their high garde.
All in all, by getting money to children for each high grade, not only the parents encourage their children to be top student in school, but they also lear them to have good income in their life by hard working.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 359, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'parents'' or 'parent's'?
Suggestion: parents'; parent's
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Line 3, column 361, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'dollar' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'dollars'.
Suggestion: dollars
...ass. My parents promised me to give two dollar for each top grade on the class. I star...
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Line 3, column 555, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
... from him bacause it changed to a habit the be best and top student on the class for m...
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Line 3, column 853, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[4]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'being the best'.
Suggestion: being the best
...id not encourage me be giving money for being best player, it could not be possible for me...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, third, thus, for example, for instance, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1802.0 1977.66487455 91% => OK
No of words: 394.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.57360406091 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45527027702 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.40237241774 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 178.0 212.727598566 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.451776649746 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 531.0 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.5436078627 48.9658058833 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.0 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1764705882 20.6045352989 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.52941176471 5.45110844103 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.374896994697 0.236089414692 159% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.155345073639 0.076458572812 203% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.111944536597 0.0737576698707 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.27657670258 0.150856017488 183% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0185954128183 0.0645574589148 29% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 73.51 58.1214874552 126% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.52 10.9000537634 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.06 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 86.8835125448 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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