Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays people have been experiencing far more freedom than any other era in the human history. it becomes possible thanks to today's more complex and advanced society, and it has given young people more opportunities. personally, i believe that modern young people have many advantages and flexible life styles compared to those of previous generations. I feel this way for two reasons, which i will explain in the following essay.
First of all, today's young people have better chance of following their goals, and technological advances make it more likely. In this era, obtaining information about what you want to be and what career you want to choose is easy that just typing something on internet, there will be tons of guides. As a result, it prevents parent's interventions of deciding your life. And modern parents are also more open minded to their children. my personal experience is a compelling example of this. my parents have always been supportive and respected my life choices, especially my career choice. when i entered University and decided to choose my major, there were lots of doubts and hesitation running through my mind that i needed to ask from my parents. But what my parents suggested to me was listen to your inner self instead of asking from other people because other people's opinion will more confuse you. After that i only asked from my self and i got the answer. So this indicates how much freedom i have compared to my parents' era. when they were the same age as me for choosing career, their parents or even the state decided what they or people of their ages should do because my country was a communist country.
Secondly, as long as young people's actions are not against the common law, there would be no intervention from the state in today's society. young people like as us have lots of chances of what we want to do or become if they are in line with the common law, such as we can become young entrepreneurs, directors of company, a candidate of government election, and decide when we marry or have a child. These were not the case in previous era. For instance, in my grandparents era, the state pushed young people to marry someone if they didn't marry at a certain age, and they forced couples to have at least 4 children because it would increase the population at that time.
In conclusion, i strongly believe that today's young people have more freedom. this is because young people have more opportunities thanks to the modern technology and there are less state involvement in their lives.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, secondly, so, at least, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, such as, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 60.0 43.0788530466 139% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2107.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 441.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.77777777778 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58257569496 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56835731436 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.503401360544 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 673.2 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.5201039488 48.9658058833 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.333333333 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.95238095238 5.45110844103 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 17.0 5.5376344086 307% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.144866588607 0.236089414692 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0488847554227 0.076458572812 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0370646427788 0.0737576698707 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0983904266665 0.150856017488 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00640145035191 0.0645574589148 10% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.04 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 86.8835125448 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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