Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
To remain happy and optimistic when you fail is more
important than achieving success.
Throughout history, humanity has been perpetually concerned with the routes to success. Since competition has been enhanced dramatically in the modern era, this concern has been made heated debates among different kinds of people. Some specialists might argue that achieving success is more critical than remaining happy and optimistic. I, on the contrary, hold a different view. In the following paragraphs, I will illuminate my standpoint with a vivid image and elaborate on my reasons regarding this issue.
First and foremost, no one can cast a shadow of doubt on the importance of mental health in every aspect of life. To put it differently, the more people suffer from mental illnesses, the more their efficiency in work time reduce. Take a personal experience as an example. A few years back, I started to work as an English teacher in an elementary school. The pressure on my shoulders was uprising daily because parents always wanted more progress from their children, and they blame me for that matter. In the climax of predicaments, I went to see a psychologist, and he told me to spend more time relaxing in my apartment. The results were extraordinary. After one month, I was back on track, and parents started to like me even more than before.
Furthermore, one should not underestimate the fact that if you lose control when you are in the trenches, you may face irreversible losses. Failures won’t end. In the introduction of a book that I recently read, there was a saying from Falkner. “no one should neglect the significant impact of sorrow in the way to triumph.” This saying meticulously depicts anyone should embrace sorrow and exert it well to reach to his desires. I want to juxtapose sorrow with happiness. Both of them are emotional reactions to one’s surroundings. In this regard, I think people should persistently retain their satisfaction and optimistic viewpoint.
To encapsulate, I cling to the idea that says remaining happy and optimistic in times of difficulties is more important than achieving success. However, that was a story in a nutshell. Protecting one’s happiness is a remarkable act that needs experience and concentration. All in all, isn’t it true that whenever we lose, we don’t have the courage to start over for an extended period? Maybe we can only minimize the length of this period.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, however, if, may, regarding, so, well, i think, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1989.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 389.0 407.700716846 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.11311053985 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44106776838 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04459185902 2.67179642975 114% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.596401028278 0.524837075471 114% => OK
syllable_count: 622.8 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.9411504271 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.56 100.406767564 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.56 20.6045352989 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.32 5.45110844103 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0588332342561 0.236089414692 25% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0165245679075 0.076458572812 22% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0561571869358 0.0737576698707 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0372389997658 0.150856017488 25% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0378606710906 0.0645574589148 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.06 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.8 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 86.8835125448 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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