Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Universities should spend more money on facilities (such as computer labs and technology in general) rather than on hiring some famous professors.
It is no secret that improving the quality of education in universities plays a significant role in the preparation of students for their future career life. In the past decades, in particular, this problem has found its way in many educational systems in most developed and underdevelopment countries. For this aim, many methods have been proposed by the decision-makers in different societies. A significant problem, in this regard, is about the most appropriate way in which the money could be spent on enhancing the level of education. While a considerable number of universities believe in recruiting well-known professors, many others think it would be better to allocate the available budget for improving equipment and facilities. I personally agree with the second idea, due to a couple of reasons, two of which are the significant role of the internet in education, and the undeniable importance of practical education, which are argued hereunder.
In the past two decades, the internet has been known as a source, which could be considered for solving each of our demands. Nowadays, all courses taught by the most famous professors and from the most top-ranked universities are accessible on the internet for individuals all around the world. Hence, allocating the budget for hiring high-level professors, although exciting, would not be the best idea for spending the money. Indeed, the students could use the internet to find their desired courses, which have been taught by professors not only probably with higher quality than the professors in their university, but also the most famous ones in the world.
Moreover, today’s societies need experts with practical skills rather than well-educated workers. I believe that despite the significance of education, the importance of practical skills should be taken into account by the universities, more than before. In this regard, the students should take part in a majority of laboratory-based courses and spend more time working on practical projects. Obviously, this matter needs the budget to be spent on providing appropriate facilities and suitable educational equipment. As a result, it would be better to allocate the money to these kinds of consumptions.
To sum up, regarding the aforementioned reasons, I vehemently support the idea of spending the available budget on improving the level of facilities in comparison to allocating it to hiring famous professors.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e money to these kinds of consumptions. To sum up, regarding the aforementioned ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, moreover, regarding, second, so, well, while, in particular, as a result, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 43.0788530466 46% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2084.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 382.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.4554973822 4.8611393121 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42095241839 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.17154888794 2.67179642975 119% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.486910994764 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 648.0 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.0202986246 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.25 100.406767564 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.875 20.6045352989 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.5625 5.45110844103 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.150435489984 0.236089414692 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0504733616497 0.076458572812 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0382276684355 0.0737576698707 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.103481869228 0.150856017488 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0336768728809 0.0645574589148 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 11.7677419355 138% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 58.1214874552 68% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.68 10.9000537634 135% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.91 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 86.8835125448 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 10.002688172 125% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 68.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.5 Out of 30
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