Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Young people nowadays do not give enough time to helping their communities.
It is no secret that today, the development of each country I directly depended on its people, living in that society. The community needs individuals, able to handle different responsibilities related to all demands of the community. In this context, some people believe that young persons do not play a major role in their communities because they do not allocate enough time for this aim. I personally do not agree with this idea, due to a couple of reasons, two of which are not paying enough attention to their abilities, and not providing them with appropriate facilities, which will be argued hereunder.
First and foremost, in most of the countries, despite numerous talks made by the leaders about the position of the youth in their thoughts, they do not consider them in any of the significant problems of the society. Indeed, they just appreciate the young people and their abilities in their speech and do not give them important roles. Therefore, the youth have not the opportunity of taking part in solving the community’s serious issues. Hence, many people think that young individuals do not give enough time as others do for the improvement of their society.
Secondly, in few communities that give the youth the chance of taking important responsibilities regarding the needs of the society, the leaders do not welcome their requests for giving them enough facilities or equipment to do what they want. Take a personal experience as an example. Two years ago, a friend of mine and I decided to start a project for repairing the old equipment of the thermodynamics lab in the department of mechanical engineering in our university. We asked the administrator of the department to give us some money for this aim. Although it was a volunteer work, and we did not want any money for ourselves, they did not give us the required money, and the project canceled. Three months after the cancellation, the coordinator of the lab in one of the classes had claimed that if students were worried about their education, at least one of them should have offered to help in the maintenance of the facilities in the lab. It is just a simple example of what happens most times to the youth in many societies.
To sum up, regarding the aforementioned reasons, I vehemently not only contradict this idea that young people do not spend adequate time for their communities but also categorically believe that, in some cases, they dedicate themselves to their societies’ problems.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...lves to their societies' problems.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, regarding, second, secondly, so, therefore, at least, in some cases, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2089.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 418.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9976076555 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52162009685 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9883514303 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.504784688995 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 652.5 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 65.78741806 48.9658058833 134% => OK
Chars per sentence: 130.5625 100.406767564 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.125 20.6045352989 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.6875 5.45110844103 123% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.316948934628 0.236089414692 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.103421103642 0.076458572812 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.114754265219 0.0737576698707 156% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.21074833625 0.150856017488 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0666739407625 0.0645574589148 103% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 11.7677419355 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 58.1214874552 78% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.63 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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