Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
When classmates or colleagues communicate about a project in person instead of by e-mail, they will produce better work for the project.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Communication between the group while performing any kind of work is substantial for producing productive results. This is because with every one chipping in, new and creative ideas can easily generate. However, the debate on which type of communication - e-mail or face to face- holds supremacy, can be a conflicting one . If I were to choose, I would definitely agree with the superiority of personal communication over electronic mail, for producing better results. I feel this way for several reasons, and I will develop these ideas in the subsequent paragraphs.
To begin with, not every thing can be clearly transmitted through electronic mail. To be more specific, the only means of exchanging ideas in e-mail is by writing, and this may not be sufficient every time. Effective communication occurs not only when ideas are simply exchanged, but it also requires transmission of personal feelings, emotions and some complex ideas that cannot be exchanged in text. I have to admit that my own opinion on this matter has been profoundly influenced by my own personal experience. You see, during my college days, we used to have group assignments on sociology classes, which required inputs from everyone. Unfortunately, once, I suffered from intense fever and was on a complete bed rest. So, I was not able to attend one of our group assignments, which required video making on the topic " farmers and innovative technologies". Even through my sickness, I decided to provide my inputs through e-mail. I developed a very creative idea of filming a drama video of farmers along with sound effects and pictures, all depicting the before and after effects of technologies on farmers life. My group mates liked this idea and went along with it. However, since I was not there to personally overlook the process we suffered from mis-communication and my team ended up downloading a video from the net and presenting it. As a result, we could not do our best and ended up getting bad grades. For this reason, e-mail communication will not always be able to produce the best results.
Secondly, e-mails may not always be accessible, which will create the need of personal communication. Certainly, today's world is technologically advanced and sending e-mails may not be an issue for all of us. However, there are still a lot of places where this form of information exchange is either absent or not prevalent.Drawing from my own experience, two years ago, I was sent to a remote village during mu internship, where I was assigned the job of collecting local ideas on sustainable farming practices. The participants, with whom I had to interact used to live in distant places and the most effective way of doing my job was by asking them to sent their ideas through mails. To my dismay, although everyone had a personal computer, but still none of them knew how to sent mails. So, my only option was to personally visit them and collect that info. It's certainly clear to see why personal communication holds superiority over e-mails.
In light of the above mentioned reasons, I strongly belief that a project can produce more better results only through person to person contact.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, still, while, as to, i feel, kind of, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 79.0 52.1666666667 151% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2667.0 1977.66487455 135% => OK
No of words: 531.0 407.700716846 130% => OK
Chars per words: 5.02259887006 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.80035803286 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00141295676 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 279.0 212.727598566 131% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.525423728814 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 846.9 618.680645161 137% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.8601898371 48.9658058833 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.576923077 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4230769231 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.65384615385 5.45110844103 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.177087170148 0.236089414692 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0547537383545 0.076458572812 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0542636346804 0.0737576698707 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.128348710286 0.150856017488 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0388707235168 0.0645574589148 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.41 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 127.0 86.8835125448 146% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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