What discovery in the last 100 years has been most beneficial for people in your country? Use specific reasons and examples to support your choice
The world today, is blessed by a huge number of scientific discovery. No matter the field in which the discovery was made, each and every one of them have made our life more easier, more safe and more safe. Although, the number of such discoveries are countless and their comparative evaluation is a pretty hard task, but if I had to choose one, then I would choose the discovery of cure for Tuberculosis.
Yes, in my country- Nepal, the discovery of cure for a deadly, communicable disease Tuberculosis holds a great historical importance. After the cure was found in the form of a vaccine, it marked a paradigm shift in social, economical and personal sectors. For example, before the cure was found, the patients suffering from it were socially excluded, they were not allowed to live among their family and friends for the fear of disease transmission and this made their death certain. The people were so superstitious that they called this disease a deadly sin bestowed upon them by the wrath of god and the only work for the infected ones was to wait for their death.
This had became an gruesome blockage in the progress of society and the country as a whole. The economy was badly affected and their was no social harmony. However, all of this changed drastically after the cure was discovered and distributed in the country. The diseased were cured, every-one got their shots and the hatred of the infected one vanished along with the disease. This increased social harmony and collaboration. All the barriers of growth and prosperity were broken down and it marked a significant growth in the economy of the country.
In sum, the discovery of cure for tuberculosis was a very beneficial one for the people of my country. It not only had merit in the health sectors, but also had a direct effect on social and economic areas.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 124, Rule ID: EACH_AND_EVERY[1]
Message: Consider using 'each one'.
Suggestion: each one
... field in which the discovery was made, each and every one of them have made our life more easier,...
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Line 1, column 170, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[2]
Message: Use only 'easier' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: easier
...nd every one of them have made our life more easier, more safe and more safe. Although, the...
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Line 1, column 221, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
..., more safe and more safe. Although, the number of such discoveries are countless...
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Line 5, column 103, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... communicable disease Tuberculosis holds a great historical importance. After the...
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Line 9, column 10, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'become'.
Suggestion: become
...to wait for their death. This had became an gruesome blockage in the progress of...
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Line 9, column 17, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
... for their death. This had became an gruesome blockage in the progress of so...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, then, as to, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 11.0286738351 18% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 43.0788530466 58% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1532.0 1977.66487455 77% => OK
No of words: 319.0 407.700716846 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.80250783699 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22617688928 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66548389502 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 212.727598566 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.532915360502 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 495.9 618.680645161 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.2475100106 48.9658058833 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.133333333 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.2666666667 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.46666666667 5.45110844103 64% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0912947752723 0.236089414692 39% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0333179811024 0.076458572812 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0478298115493 0.0737576698707 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0660860818987 0.150856017488 44% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0376899209015 0.0645574589148 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.56 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.44 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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