What discovery in the last 100 years has been most beneficial for people in your country? Use specific reasons and examples to support your choice.
The past century has witnessed an unprecedented growth and discoveries which has been a boon to the civilization. Weather the field of science, technology, archaeology and so on; you name it and we have it. Among those, I believe, medical advancement has been one of the most beneficial progresses for the people in my country. I feel this way for the following reason.
First of all, because of the discoveries in medical field, today, it is possible to diagnose the disease early and prevent it. In the past, inability of diagnosis and intervene at the right time was one of the major cause of mortality and morbidity among the people. For instance, my grandmother had a congenital cardiac disease, which was diagnosed when she was 10. Due to delayed diagnosis and unawareness of the condition, she was always sick and passed away at an early age of 17. On the other hand, when one of my cousins was suffering from the similar heart disease with hole in her heart, she was diagnosed in-vitro, and intervened just after the birth on the same day. Today she is 25, living a healthy life. This demonstrates how medical field advancement has reduced mortality rate than the past.
Moreover, development in surgical interventions has taken human’s experience of his health to the next level. Earlier, limited facilities for the cure of illness had kept people under the dark shadow of pain and disabilities for rest of their lives. For example, my neighbour’s uncle had developed pulmonary fibrosis in both the lungs, caused due to inhalation of fragments of his pet bird’s feathers. There was no cure for such conditions back then. Consequently, he couldn’t work, walk and even perform his daily activities due to limitation caused by breathlessness. In addition, he suffered from recurrent lung infections until he died. Conversely, when my uncle was suffering from a similar condition of pulmonary fibrosis, in his time, there was an advanced surgical management for such condition to improve the quality of life of patients. Thus, he was surgically operated for bilateral lung transplant. He had good prognosis and returned to his job with his portable oxygen port. My uncle would not have experienced such an improvement in his health without the discovery of such advanced medical services.
In conclusion, medical discoveries have proved to be helpful for people in my country. This is because it had developed early diagnosis and prevention of the fatal diseases otherwise and because the advances in the surgical intervention has upsurge the quality of life of the citizens.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 13, column 242, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'upsurged'.
Suggestion: upsurged
...vances in the surgical intervention has upsurge the quality of life of the citizens. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, conversely, first, if, moreover, so, then, thus, for example, for instance, i feel, in addition, in conclusion, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.0752688172 211% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2192.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 427.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13348946136 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54576487731 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99138688285 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.536299765808 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 690.3 618.680645161 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.8982601365 48.9658058833 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.3043478261 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5652173913 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.82608695652 5.45110844103 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0920289221502 0.236089414692 39% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0325114602597 0.076458572812 43% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0450097402519 0.0737576698707 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0757502464744 0.150856017488 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0574418446473 0.0645574589148 89% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.41 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 86.8835125448 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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