What discovery in the last 100 years has been most beneficial for people in your country? Use specific reasons and examples to support your choice.
In the modern life, technology has become such an important part of our lives that without it, the world would be radically different. In my country, technology has a big part of invention. No one can escape from absolute need of technology which we can not do without them. Everybody of us is dependent on technology which brings innovative ideas in my country. The educational system where I have been a student for the last 16 year in my country was a technological school that I had opportunity to discover math based program application in my major field of study, I can only imagine the benefits of technology inventions.
The first point I would like to make is that there are compelling benefits of using technology in my country. One very valuable benefit is that technology, especially the internet, makes all information easily accessible for people. Something else that is good is that people have experience to reach any material on the internet. Therefore, they are unlimited to discovery whatever they want and think. When you need to have a course to development your project, you will not need to travel abroad or somewhere else. For instance, when I was studying industrial engineering in university in Turkey, I had a project search which is about of an application. My friends and I tried to create an application about mathematical models. With the help of the technology, we set up this program, and we give permission students to access this simulation program. It was for university a big success and greatest innovative idea.
More important than the benefit of technology is that transportation system has had an important changes in my country. People don't prefer to use cars compare to the past. Furthermore, after we had a good public infrastructure, air pollution has decreased for the last 100 years. Therefore, my country has had more livable environment and a place which is cleaner urban transport. These advantages brings many advantages to my country. First, my country has been the most beautiful place for tourists.
In conclusion, I have had these experience of invention in my life, and I have been a successful person in this way because this style work is a good match with my personality. I can imagine, for some country, the most beneficial inventions or works might be a different tool. However, for my country, technology has played an important role for the last 100 years.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'change'?
Suggestion: change
...nsportation system has had an important changes in my country. People dont prefer to us...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...important changes in my country. People dont prefer to use cars compare to the past....
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Message: You should probably use 'bring'.
Suggestion: bring
...eaner urban transport. These advantages brings many advantages to my country. First, m...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, however, if, so, therefore, as for, for instance, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2024.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 408.0 407.700716846 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.96078431373 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49433085973 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98353082282 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.517156862745 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 647.1 618.680645161 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 45.5281130042 48.9658058833 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.0 100.406767564 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7391304348 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.60869565217 5.45110844103 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.146881002183 0.236089414692 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0440884188966 0.076458572812 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0482777934387 0.0737576698707 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0954146088172 0.150856017488 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0312579357545 0.0645574589148 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.19 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.96 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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