Prompt: The best idea arises from a passionate interest in commonplace things.
Twenty first century has been blessed by a surfeit of creative, intelligent and extra-ordinary minds. We are living in such a developed times that the technologies, we encounter, nowadays, were just beyond the wildest imagination of our ancestors. Hence, all this does creates a question in our mind, Who came with such ideas?, What inspired them to break the wheel and design something new?, Was their invention something out of the blue or was it a simple transcendence of ordinary, banal life-events?. Different people will have different views on this matter and no-one can prove the superiority of one, but in my view all such great ideas simply arose form a passionate, incessant effort and interest in making something better out of everyday things. So, I completely agree with the given prompt and would like to justify my thesis on the basis of following three examples.
Modern world is blessed by "high-tech" technological innovations. Such, technologies have been an inherent part of our everyday life. However, a question arises, What galvanized the creators to invent such inventions? Or What was the thing that sparked their mind?. The answer to this is simple, it was just a careful observance of everyday things. For instance, let us look at the invention of the mighty flying machines" Aero planes". This technologically sophisticated flying machines was the gift to us by the Wright Brothers, they were the one who first drew the basic work plan of the first ever man made flying machine, and what was their inspiration. Was it a vision form an extra dimensional being? Or a superior intelligence granted by our creator? No, it was just a simple observance of the birds flying in the sky and their passionate adherence to the dream of creating something similar. All the scientific innovations have been made because of similar understanding of the everyday life. Nature stroke earth with lightening and primitive man studied it, to create fire. Spark produced by the friction of water with stone, inspired us to generate electricity. So, as it is seen most of the greatest idea of our generation, was simply a passionate copy of everyday things.
Furthermore, let us look at the life of some of the world greatest minds. The brilliance of Mark Zuckerberg is undeniable. His creation- Facebook- has stormed the modern era and every man hooked up with internet, now has a Facebook profile. He single handedly revolutionized global communication. A man at the north pole can chat up, with his friend living in the other end of the globe, just by opening a simple application in his device. So, the question arises, what inspired Mr. Zuckerberg to create this application, and the answer is well-known, Facebook was created not because of some mysterious happenings, but simply due to his desire to find an easy way to communicate with his friends. The same example can be taken from the discovery of gravity by Newton. We all have heard the famous anecdote of a ripe apple falling in his head, and how this inspired him to search further and propound the laws of gravity. This simple observance of a fruit falling from a tree, urged him to derive such complex equations of gravitational motion. All this shows, that some of the greatest mind of our world, got their idea of creation just by having a strong predilection to extrapolate the understanding of everyday life.
Apart from the examples of science, I would like to put up a simple story I read in my primary school. The story was about King Robert of Scotland. He was a wise and brave king and had a desire to conquer England. However, his army could not succeed and was forced back six times. The last attack was such a fiasco, that the king himself had to run away and hide in a cave. In the cave, the king espied a sight of a spider, who was trying to weave a web by throwing it across the edge of a slippery rock. No matter how many times she tried, she could not succeed and this reminded the king of his similar fate. However, the difference was that the king was already crestfallen and planning to give up, but the spider had a different intention. She tried and tried and gave up only after succeeding. This simple act of perseverance, inspired the king to continue on his attack and finally claim his victory. This story easily justifies, how such simple things, when followed by great passion can lead to us beautiful achievement.
In conclusion, it is true that only having a passionate observance of commonplace things cannot lead us to great achievements, if it was so, then everybody would have written their name in history. Of course, there is need of constant determination, will power and colossal effort. However, in the absence of an idea, all these things do not matter and cannot lead to great accomplishments.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, look, so, then, well, apart from, as for, for instance, in conclusion, of course, in my view, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 33.0 19.5258426966 169% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 29.0 14.8657303371 195% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 74.0 33.0505617978 224% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 118.0 58.6224719101 201% => Less preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 31.0 12.9106741573 240% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 4021.0 2235.4752809 180% => OK
No of words: 826.0 442.535393258 187% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.86803874092 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.36099018152 4.55969084622 118% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90685504227 2.79657885939 104% => OK
Unique words: 396.0 215.323595506 184% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.479418886199 0.4932671777 97% => OK
syllable_count: 1247.4 704.065955056 177% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 21.0 6.24550561798 336% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 10.0 4.99550561798 200% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 8.0 1.77640449438 450% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 43.0 20.2370786517 212% => Too many sentences.
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 55.7369624022 60.3974514979 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.511627907 118.986275619 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2093023256 23.4991977007 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.67441860465 5.21951772744 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 26.0 10.2758426966 253% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.83258426966 207% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0914409133539 0.243740707755 38% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0194350487415 0.0831039109588 23% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0348377790995 0.0758088955206 46% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0552855158871 0.150359130593 37% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.020157650834 0.0667264976115 30% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 14.1392134831 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.8420337079 124% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 12.1639044944 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.81 8.38706741573 93% => OK
difficult_words: 169.0 100.480337079 168% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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