Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Young people should try several different jobs before they take a long term career.
This topic raises the controversial issue of whether the young people need to try different jobs before they start having a long term career. Some people are inclined toward the young should express their loyalty and consistency in their job, so switching from job to job is not an ideal situation. However, some other take an opposite viewpoint and believe that having several various job experiences is preferable before the young decide their entire life career. I, for one, subscribe to the idea that young people should try doing various jobs before they start a steady and long-term job. In the following paragraph, I will delve into the most outstanding reasons.
First of all, the chief reason why I essentially believe that taking different jobs can help the young to find out their real interest. Through diverse job experiences, young people are able to figure out what the substantial content of a job is and whether the job really match their habits and ability, since having job that you love to do it is of vital merits in your happiness in life. For example, a student who's major was finance just graduated from the college. In order to show the loyalty, he decides to dedicate his whole work life to the financial industry immediately. After passing time, the more understanding this job is not exactly according to his interest, the more facing some problem such as encountering a depression, feeling frustrate and so forth. This fact even effect on this worker and it may lower his work pace and lose ability to tackle with the problem. Therefore, if he has chance to experience several jobs, he will be able to find out the true habit with which he can enjoy the work and then get promotion.
However, there exists the possibility that though taking several different jobs before a formal job have positive influence on young people, not all young people need to do that to some extent. Individuals major in different fields must have different choices and plans for future career. For instance, I am major in biology in the university and I decide to be a researcher in the lab after I graduate. I think that it is unnecessary for me take several different jobs at presents, because I am busy working in the labs and try to gain as much research experience as possible, in order to reach my career goal in the future. These research works are always hard and time-consuming, so I virtually have no spare time to take several other works. However, the above argument does not constitute sufficient support to claim that choosing long-term job and being resist is more important because as I have outlined earlier, there exist outstanding merits in taking different jobs.
To sum up, One can draw a conclusion that, by reaching different types of jobs can not only let young people have opportunity to realise what they really want to do in the future but also enable them to obtain experience before they identify and pursue their lifetime career. Although other sides of this opinion make sense to be acceptable, I believe that switching job to job and having several job outweigh being steady and choosing long-term job for first time. Of course, to better assess the topic and its consequences in different aspects of life, more scientific approaches need to be applied through vast researches among all different culture.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: several
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...to do in the future but also enable them to obtain experience before they identif...
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...researches among all different culture.
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'really', 'so', 'then', 'therefore', 'for example', 'for instance', 'i think', 'of course', 'such as', 'first of all', 'to sum up']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.207430340557 0.229887763892 90% => OK
Verbs: 0.170278637771 0.158761421928 107% => OK
Adjectives: 0.131578947368 0.0866891130778 152% => OK
Adverbs: 0.046439628483 0.046263068375 100% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0603715170279 0.0685040099705 88% => OK
Prepositions: 0.113003095975 0.118717715034 95% => OK
Participles: 0.0386996904025 0.0351676179071 110% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.5866447148 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0433436532508 0.0309702414327 140% => OK
Particles: 0.0061919504644 0.00188951952338 328% => OK
Determiners: 0.0820433436533 0.0887237588012 92% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0170278637771 0.0209618222197 81% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0061919504644 0.0139019557991 45% => Some subClauses wanted starting by 'Which, Who, What, Whom, Whose.....'
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3498.0 2387.08602151 147% => OK
No of words: 595.0 408.028673835 146% => OK
Chars per words: 5.87899159664 5.86048508987 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.93888872473 4.48200974243 110% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.341176470588 0.338922669872 101% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.243697478992 0.251872472559 97% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.164705882353 0.174417080927 94% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.117647058824 0.112833075102 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5866447148 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 291.0 212.727598566 137% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.489075630252 0.524397521467 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 60.2009107302 59.2087087015 102% => OK
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6684587814 111% => OK
Sentence length: 25.8695652174 20.5533526081 126% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.7899082167 48.84282405 120% => OK
Chars per sentence: 152.086956522 120.699889404 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.8695652174 20.5533526081 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.739130434783 0.644075263715 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.5376344086 110% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.54480286738 126% => OK
Readability: 50.2393131166 45.7405998639 110% => OK
Elegance: 1.29608938547 1.45489161554 89% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.334763091112 0.300154397459 112% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.11659487925 0.103427244359 113% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.10679081159 0.0752933317313 142% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.521380264128 0.497263757937 105% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.113696503263 0.151897553556 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.151682572426 0.114077575197 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.155465000537 0.0781384742642 199% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.423925906683 0.336927656856 126% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.048797210471 0.067059652881 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.362919639627 0.210909579961 172% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.327263686006 0.0618886996521 529% => Less connections among paragraphs
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8870967742 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.86379928315 129% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.91756272401 122% => OK
Positive topic words: 11.0 8.42114695341 131% => OK
Negative topic words: 4.0 2.4623655914 162% => OK
Neutral topic words: 5.0 2.75985663082 181% => OK
Total topic words: 20.0 13.6433691756 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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