Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Young people today have no influence on the important decisions that determine the future of the society as a whole.
(TPO-32)
There is no shortage of debate about decisions that determine the future of the society. In my opinion young people have an influence on this kind of important decisions.
First of all, one of the important decisions for every society in choosing the leaders. Today that happens by voting. Voting is a very important activity in every country. Young people constitue a big population in every country. It means that important decisions are made by young individuals. It is obvious that the leader of the society, for example the president in a country, plays an important role in the future of that society. Therefore, young people play an important role by choosing their leader.
Secondly, young people make decisions for their own lives. They decide what to study, what career to choose and who to marry with. In my opinion all of these are important decisions for the society too. For instance, imagine a country that most of the young people decide not marry and stay single. What will happen for that society? Actually it will be awful. The population of the society will decrease dramatically. A few years later there will be a lot of old individuals and there will be no one to take care of them. Thus when young people make decisions for their own lives, they make decisions for their society too.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that young people have vital impact on the important decisions that determine the future of the society. This is because they are the ones who choose their leaders and presidents, and leaders play an important role in the future of the country. Also when they decide about their own lives, they decide for their society indirectly.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Also,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, first, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, for example, for instance, in conclusion, kind of, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 52.1666666667 67% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1392.0 1977.66487455 70% => OK
No of words: 287.0 407.700716846 70% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.85017421603 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11595363751 4.48103885553 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49873646274 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 120.0 212.727598566 56% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.418118466899 0.524837075471 80% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 446.4 618.680645161 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 20.1344086022 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.4337804361 48.9658058833 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 66.2857142857 100.406767564 66% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.6666666667 20.6045352989 66% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.66666666667 5.45110844103 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.267592317316 0.236089414692 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0963979491379 0.076458572812 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.066414335767 0.0737576698707 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.200601701329 0.150856017488 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0555485980673 0.0645574589148 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.2 11.7677419355 70% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.28 58.1214874552 100% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.26 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.2 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 86.8835125448 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.0537634409 72% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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