Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Young people today have no influence on the important decisions that determine the future of the society as a whole. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
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We all love to live in an ideal society which help us to be more successful. In my opinion, today the youth have a great influence on the essential decisions which create the future of the society. I feel this way for two main reasons which I will explore in the following essay.
First, today young people can vote, and decide who will be their future government officials. The future of a society is very dependent on the decisions made by officials about different topics. When someone decides about the government's network, they indirectly influence the decisions which are going to be made by them. As a result, they are going to affect the society as a whole. My own experience demonstrates the importance of voting by young adults. When I was in freshmen year, there was an election in our city, Tehran. Many young people were in favor of one of the candidates while older adults were not into him. After the election our favorite candidate won the election, and in the following years our environment was very close to what we would have expected.
Second, young people are very energetic and can start movements in order to achieve what they want. In history, there were many movements or manifestations leaded by the youth which changed the society's direction. The example of my country explains it. About forty years ago, young people started a revolution which changed all the people's future. They sent the current king away and chose a new king for themselves. Had they not been able to affect the society, our king would have been the same as then.
In conclusion, I firmly believe that the youth strongly affect the society's future because they can vote, and because the can cause movements, manifestations and revolutions.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, second, so, then, while, i feel, in conclusion, as a result, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 52.1666666667 65% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1449.0 1977.66487455 73% => OK
No of words: 299.0 407.700716846 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.84615384615 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1583189471 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5919538245 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 212.727598566 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.531772575251 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 459.9 618.680645161 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.6389742463 48.9658058833 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.5 100.406767564 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.6111111111 20.6045352989 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.72222222222 5.45110844103 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.186559250516 0.236089414692 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0592278029267 0.076458572812 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0389351705437 0.0737576698707 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.106120979729 0.150856017488 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.044604209775 0.0645574589148 69% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.7 11.7677419355 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.55 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.92 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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