Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Young people today have no influence on the important decisions that determine the future of the society as a whole. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
By and large, young people are the most important group of every society. It is owing to the fact that the young make the future of each living groups, and their contribution to society brings long-term effects. In this regard, some people believe that critical decisions changing society in the long run have not been influenced by the young. Personally speaking, I disagree with the statement, and in the ensuing lines, I will delve into two reasons to substantiate my points.
To begin with, young people have a great deal of access to a variety of tools that influence society thoughts. With the growth of technology and the proliferation of social media, the adolescent can easily pass their thoughts. In the past, young people had not the chance to explain their beliefs and reasons behind them, yet today, they have had a plethora of platforms to communicate and change other people's mind. For example, in the last presidential election in my country, young people played an essential role, and they directly influenced adult's votes. By using social media such as Telegram, Facebook, and WhatsApp, young people have shared important news and events. They have had a place to discuss presidential debates and state their wants and expectations. As a result, not only did they change the decisions of other people, but also they influenced the candidates’ arguments. So, having had abundant tools, the young make important changes in society.
The second reason is that young people have more concerns about society future than the past. Today, the young are educated enough to understand that they need to contribute to their societies' decisions. Adolescent people have known that if they did not state their wishes and fight for them, they would not have a desired future. Therefore, they try their best to change the situation to an acceptable one. My experience in this regard is a compelling example of this idea. When I was a student, my friends and I had a great concern about our future job market, and how we would be a good candidate for our desired jobs. To address our issues, we have talked to the university dean to create an adaptive curriculum chart which is changed according to the job market's need. Also, we asked our university to hold useful workshops teaching the required skills for future jobs. After a while, students of other universities have found out and asked for a similar education system. This effort finally made a big change in the relation of universities and industries to optimize the required knowledge and skills. Had we not worried about our future, we would not have changed our universities' obsolete courses.
In summary, all the aforementioned reasons bring us to the conclusion that today, the young have played a great role in society's decisions. It has a variety of reasons, the first two of which are the existence of wide easily-used communication tools and the young higher education
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, if, second, so, therefore, while, for example, in summary, such as, as a result, by and large, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2462.0 1977.66487455 124% => OK
No of words: 493.0 407.700716846 121% => OK
Chars per words: 4.9939148073 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71206996034 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69716017476 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 245.0 212.727598566 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.496957403651 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 759.6 618.680645161 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 28.4687618277 48.9658058833 58% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 98.48 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.72 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.4 5.45110844103 99% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.260401948265 0.236089414692 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0818402941802 0.076458572812 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0609015857095 0.0737576698707 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.181676973934 0.150856017488 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0546259251528 0.0645574589148 85% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 11.7677419355 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.42 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 120.0 86.8835125448 138% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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