Young people today have no influence on the important decisions that determine the future of the society as a whole.
Making a decision is one of challenging issue for human or even harder for society. There is a debate on whether young individuals nowadays have an influence on the future of their society or not. In my opinion, youth have no impression of the whole people who live in the same country. I feel this way by two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, adolescent persons, especially under eighteen years old, have formed a small part of every society since twenty years ago or so because the childbearing rate has decreased, so the difference age between youth and elder people has increased, crime rate have risen since 1990. As a result, the number of young persons are not sufficient to establish a unanimous association in order to effect on society such as governments, unions, and so forth since elder people and their parents have not heard their voice and also thought that they are not mature enough to make a decision precisely and they have not cared about them in some issues, for instance, politician, environmental, and social issue, to name but a few. My own experience is a compelling example of this. When I was fourteen years old, one of my friends who were my classmate and I had triggered to collect a vote for my given candidate by advertisement in our neighborhood; we set up a friendly tent and gave people who asked us about our activity in this tent a cap which was written the name of this person. Therefore, having come to this tent, people went immediately because our clearly comprehensive understanding was they considered us as children, not more.
Secondly, mature people have a significant role in hectic life nowadays. To clarify this point, they are as managers, leaders, governments, etc. these persons who are well-known have important plays in societies. If young people want to compete, they will not win because famous and pioneer people are powerful and money; they can do easily whatever they want. Even though youth until legal age will be supported by their parents and families, they will not able to compete with those famed people who have a great impression on their country or even other countries. For instance, I read the news that was written people made a parade for a new law about increasing taxes. After one night, one of the celebrities made a speech on television so that many people who participated in the parade quitted that demonstration, especially youth individuals.
To sum up, I strongly believe that the young generation cannot affect their society even if they want to do so. This is because older people have an adverse view of them and because elder people who have great positions will able to affect their society and young individuals cannot compete with them.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, for instance, i feel, such as, as a result, first of all, in my opinion, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2296.0 1977.66487455 116% => OK
No of words: 474.0 407.700716846 116% => OK
Chars per words: 4.84388185654 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66599839874 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70114705455 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 244.0 212.727598566 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.514767932489 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 734.4 618.680645161 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 99.9302843406 48.9658058833 204% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 127.555555556 100.406767564 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.3333333333 20.6045352989 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.94444444444 5.45110844103 146% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.257911910944 0.236089414692 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0841062610862 0.076458572812 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0717147856804 0.0737576698707 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.181454052541 0.150856017488 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0599054289455 0.0645574589148 93% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 11.7677419355 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.09 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.29 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 86.8835125448 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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