Do you agree or disagree? Physical exercise is more important for older people than young people.
Physical exercise is one of the vital elements that every person should consider. Some say elderly people should care about their physical exercise more than juveniles, whereas others say youngsters should exercise more. I agree with the former of the view. My reasons are substantiated in subsequent paragraphs.
The first reason worth mentioning is that elder people are remarkably exposed to diseases. To elucidate, as time goes on, human bodies are becoming vulnerable, which gives rise to get serious illnesses, such as blood pressure, lung cancer, heart attack, to name but a few. young people are more active than older individuals; they go to work and burn energy, sometimes walk on their feet for commuting, riding a bicycle, so in hustle and bustle of life, they burn more energy as long as they are not becoming old. To support this view, I need only look as far as my aunt and father. My retired father who is 65 years old the same age as my aunt is used to hiking on the park located near his apartment every day, but my aunt who has never exercised during her life was dealing with cancer. The doctors said that if she had exercised regularly like his brother, he would never become ill. She is suffering from cancer, while my father is well-being.
Another key point that makes me hold this view is that for elder individuals when they are infected by diseases takes a longer time to recover in comparison with the youngster. To clarify this notion, after having got sick, old man needs more caring with compared to youngster since their mental and physical are starting to involved in disease, act as a domino, putting pressure on all bodies and engaged them. To prevent this circumstance, an older person needs to regular movements which bring about thriving and growing defense cells in their bodies, such as walking, running, and team group exercise like ping pong, badminton. Also, an older man playing team activities especially when they are involved in action physically and mentally would get rid of their stress and depression that left behind inactivity. Therefore, not only would older citizens be delighted, but also they would avoid getting sick.
To arrive at a conclusion, I believe that it is more important for rather old people to commence exercising compared to youth people. This is because they are endangered to get sick. And because they will reduce their stress and become happy.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, so, therefore, well, whereas, while, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2014.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 411.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.900243309 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50256981431 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48065907911 2.67179642975 93% => OK
Unique words: 245.0 212.727598566 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.596107055961 0.524837075471 114% => OK
syllable_count: 633.6 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.1028895349 48.9658058833 137% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.0 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6315789474 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.78947368421 5.45110844103 70% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.234761862504 0.236089414692 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0637761734226 0.076458572812 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0778889686217 0.0737576698707 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.154407963837 0.150856017488 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0564181252291 0.0645574589148 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.14 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.56 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 86.8835125448 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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