Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Physical exercise is more important for older people than young people.
There is no shadow of doubt that physical exercise plays a significant role in every individual’s healthiness. A question can be raised in this regard is whether physical exercise benefits older or younger people the most. Some people state that exercise is more important for younger people, while others hold the opinion that physical activity is more crucial for older ones. I subscribe to the former opinion, and in the ensuing paragraphs, I will delve into the two main reasons to substantiate my point of view.
The first reason corroborating my opinion is that with exercising in younger age, one can remain healthier when she or he gets older. It is crystal clear that exercise has a myriad of effects in both mental and physical aspects of human’s body. By doing physical activities, people can stay fit, and it prevents from getting heart diseases when they become older. In order to illustrate, a scientific study conducted by the University of Tehran in 1990 can be pointed out. In this study, two groups of people were examined, in which one group used to do exercise five days a week, on the other hand, the other group did some activity only once a while. After twenty-five years, their physical health was studied, and some valuable results were conducted. The researchers have shown that the group which has had regular exercise in their lives stayed much healthier than the other group. Therefore, it is clear that the more people have physical activity when they are younger, the more they can prevent further disease in older ages.
The second reason supporting my idea is that physical exercise enhances the efficiency of young people during their lives. In today’s world, most portion of people’s minds is involved with their problems in daily life, because of that, allocating some time for exercise can help them to keep away from those problems; thus, they can be more prepared in their different activities in life. It is worth mentioning that youth is the most crucial part of human’s life because they have the opportunity to build their future; therefore, it is vital for them to be more effective. My opinion on this matter influenced by my father’s experience. He is sixty years old, and he has done exercise in the gym since he was fifteen. He told me, when he faced some hardships in his life, doing physical activity made him feel better, and he could make suitable decisions. Consequently, he was successful not only in his career but also in his personal life. Had my father not spent time doing exercise, he would not be efficient in his life; therefore, he would not have confronted with his problems properly. Hence, this example manifests the importance of doing exercise to be more efficient in daily life.
In conclusion, considering both the reasons mentioned above, one can infer that physical exercise is more important for younger people. Firstly, it will lead them to be more healthy in the future; second, doing exercise improves their efficiency in various aspects of their lives. As for this writer’s advice, I vehemently urge young people to allocate some time on physical exercises. By doing so, having a healthy and prosperous life will not be far-fetched.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, firstly, hence, if, second, so, therefore, thus, while, as for, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 15.1003584229 185% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 66.0 43.0788530466 153% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2713.0 1977.66487455 137% => OK
No of words: 542.0 407.700716846 133% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00553505535 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.82502781895 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.71656647101 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 263.0 212.727598566 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.485239852399 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 859.5 618.680645161 139% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.9110677507 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.52 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.68 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.12 5.45110844103 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.289539173515 0.236089414692 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0916966459527 0.076458572812 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0777445047294 0.0737576698707 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.213942931155 0.150856017488 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0507549381814 0.0645574589148 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.06 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 86.8835125448 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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