Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Because the world is changing so quickly, people now are less happy or less satisfied with their lives than people were in the past.
A reoccurring standpoint states that today, because major changes happened in the world, people do not enjoy their lives like the past, and are less happy. While others believe people are more satisfied in today's modern world. I subscribe to the latter opinion, and in the ensuing paragraphs, I will provide two reasons to illustrate my point of view.
To begin with, nowadays, thanks to modern technology, people have more free time to spend on things that make them happy and more satisfied with their lives. First, people can save a great deal of time by traveling with new transportation vehicles such as trains or airplanes, and there is no need to waste a lot of time to do this. Instead, they can use this time to improve their skills, so such as, they can get promotion and earn more money which is an essential factor for leading a happy life. Also, for instance, my mother always wanted to learn how to play piano, but she has not enough time. However, after we bought a dishwasher machine, she has time to learn piano because she used to wash the dirty dishes with her hands, but now the machine does this work. Hence, it is clear that with emerging new technology in people’s lives, they have more opportunity to spend their time on what they like more, and it brings them a happy life.
The second reason is that people enjoy better health condition nowadays. In the past, because of the lack of sufficient medicine, people suffered or even died for the simple disease. However, science is very developed and people can get cured easily by just taking some medicine. Besides, people can raise their knowledge by searching on the internet or watching TV which informs people about a healthy diet, so there is less chance for a lot of people to get sick. From my experience, I would get sick very often, but now, I get informed about a healthy life through watching health program on the TV. Therefore, we can find out that in today’ world, people are healthier than before, and it leads to a happier life.
In conclusion, considering both the reasons mentioned above, I believe that today’s people have a happier life, owing to this fact that their life is more convenient, and they have more time to do what makes them happy. Furthermore, the health condition of people improved, so they do not suffer from different disease.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, second, so, therefore, while, for instance, in conclusion, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1949.0 1977.66487455 99% => OK
No of words: 412.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.73058252427 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50530610838 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46798116871 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.531553398058 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 598.5 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 9.0 1.86738351254 482% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.0794272857 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.647058824 100.406767564 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.2352941176 20.6045352989 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.29411764706 5.45110844103 152% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.300450706929 0.236089414692 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102707872381 0.076458572812 134% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0768295795386 0.0737576698707 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.185592960741 0.150856017488 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0518367384698 0.0645574589148 80% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.45 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.85 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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