In some countries, people are no longer allowed to smoke in many public places and office buildings. Do you think this is a good rule or a bad rule?
Many people smoke around the world. Although some people think smokers should be allowed to smoke in public places, I firmly believe a rule should be passed not to let them smoke in a public room. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following paragraphs. (54 w)
First, smoking hurts other people’s health, while the smoker has no right to do so. According to recent research, cigarettes’ fume is much more harmful to other people rather than the smokers themselves. One is free to do whatever they want with their health but not with that of other people. A few months ago, when I went to a mall near my house, there was a man there who was smoking without a pause. I remember I was feeling awful when I came back home, and a bothersome headache occurred to me. This example shows how smokers can bother other people besides themselves. As the government should defend the citizens’ rights and health, it should take action regarding the smoking issue. (124 W)
Second, smokers can smoke outdoors or in special places like smoking rooms. Smoking rooms are well designed to fulfill smokers’ need for smoking, and at the same time, the non-smokers’ health won’t be affected. For example, there is a smoking room in our office, which helps smokers have a comfortable place to smoke. On the other hand, I, as someone who hates smoke and its odor, am not forced to stand its harm.
Third, smoking in public places encourages other people to smoke, especially the youth. Young people and teenagers are at a crucial age, in which they are significantly influenced by others. This means that the more smokers smoke in public places, the more young adults start to smoke, which is very harmful to society. My brother’s example illustrates this point well. A few years ago, when he was 18, my brother used to go to a coffee shop to socialize with other people. There were many people there who were addicted to cigarettes, encouraging younger adults to join them. After a while, my brother started to smoke, and unfortunately, he is still addicted to it. Had not the smokers been allowed to smoke in that coffee shop, my brother would not be a smoker now.
In conclusion, I firmly believe that smokers should not be allowed to smoke in public paces because not only does it hurt other people’s health, but also there are some special places available to smokers to smoke in.
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, if, regarding, second, so, still, third, well, while, for example, i feel, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1995.0 1977.66487455 101% => OK
No of words: 422.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.72748815166 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53239876712 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50075009524 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 219.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.518957345972 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 600.3 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 35.5623470724 48.9658058833 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.7391304348 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.347826087 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.82608695652 5.45110844103 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.234564486259 0.236089414692 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0752722280751 0.076458572812 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0663398214905 0.0737576698707 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.1561801434 0.150856017488 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0644867139974 0.0645574589148 100% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 11.7677419355 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.15 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.07 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 68.0 86.8835125448 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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