Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork.
In today’s fast-paced world, most parents have little time for their children. Although some people believe that it is better to use that time to help the children with their schoolwork, I firmly think busy parents should spend their free time playing with their kids. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following paragraphs.
First, busy parents have the opportunity to strengthen their relationship with their children by playing games or having fun. Children are very into games due to their curiosity, and as a result, one of the best ways of communicating with them is playing games or sports. As many parents do not have enough time due to their jobs, it is very important for them to build a strong bond with their kids. Thus, the children will be mentally healthier in the future and can always count on their parents. My own example illustrates this point vividly. When I was an elementary school student, my parents were both employed and could only spend two hours a day with me. However, during this small amount of time, they used to play with me with all of their hurt. I remember I was very close to them, and it helped me to never feel lonely or supportless. Even now, I still feel I can always ask for their help, and I don’t have to encounter the problems alone. It seems that if they had not played with me as a child in their little free time, I wouldn’t be intimate with them now.
Furthermore, parents who do not have a lot of time can teach moralities and values of the society to their children through play and game. Children can learn better by playing rather than listening to some advice from their parents. It is not surprising that according to a recent paper, indirect teaching is a far more useful strategy than direct teaching. Hence, busy parents can use their little time with their children to teach them virtues by means of games or sports. For example, one day ten years ago, when my father was playing basketball with me, I suddenly fell to the floor. Consequently, my father stopped the game and came to help me in spite of his chance of throwing the ball in the hoop. It may seem simple, but through this experience, I learned that it is much more important to be a kind and caring person than to be just the winner.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that preoccupied parents should spend their free time playing with their children or having fun. This is because it helps parents not only build a strong relationship with their kids, but also teach the children values and moralities indirectly.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 159, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to better', 'to well'
Suggestion: to better; to well
...rough play and game. Children can learn better by playing rather than listening to som...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, so, still, then, thus, for example, i feel, in conclusion, as a result, in spite of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 71.0 43.0788530466 165% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2126.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 460.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.62173913043 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6311565067 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45089389966 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.469565217391 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 615.6 618.680645161 100% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.51630824373 86% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 29.0264911776 48.9658058833 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 96.6363636364 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.9090909091 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.95454545455 5.45110844103 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.423663161432 0.236089414692 179% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.137658952306 0.076458572812 180% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.124346929565 0.0737576698707 169% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.302797960144 0.150856017488 201% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0414485644158 0.0645574589148 64% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 76.56 58.1214874552 132% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.52 10.9000537634 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.86 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 65.0 86.8835125448 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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