In modern society, there is no denying that senior adults play a major role in making important decisions duo to their maturity and elaborations. However, young people today can also have impact on important decisions due to their ambition and creativity.
To begin with, young people are able to be influential on important decisions due to their creativity. Being young may show that they acquire less experience, but it can also mean their potential to be innovative due to their great creativity. Take Faraday as an example. He was only 20 when he discovered the element calcium, which was an inspiring progression in chemistry at his time. In addition, it was before his thirties that he independently worked out the fabulous Faraday’s law, the foundation of the modern electric industry. Had it not been for Faraday’s incredible creativity, now we would not have enjoyed the convenience brought by diverse electric devices such as computers, smartphones and televisions. According to the statistics provided by the Times, 80% of the most excellent scientists over the past 500 years accomplished their major works before the age of 30. Consequently, it is safe to say that young men are truly powerful in affecting important decisions intimately related with the future of the society.
Furthermore, mainly owing to their great ambition and enthusiasm, young people are potent to influence important decisions. Compared to the elderly whose plentiful knowledge and expertise sometimes get in the way of their ambition, young men are more likely to maintain their enthusiasm because their outlooks are brand-new and have not been contaminated by the dirty society. Let us suppose that a senior citizen is encountering a murder criminal spot. On this occasion, chances are that he will do nothing but running away, and he even will not choose to call the police out of panic. In contrast, if a young man is involved in the same situation, it is likely that he will immediately fight with the criminal and arrest him to the police; he may even rush the victim to the hospital. This can vividly illustrate that young men are capable of making crucial decisions that influence the society because of the vigor and ambition they possess.
To sum it up, contrary to what normal people have expected, young man are actually have significant influence on important decisions that affect the whole society.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 97, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'decisions'' or 'decision's'?
Suggestion: decisions'; decision's
...s play a major role in making important decisions duo to their maturity and elaborations....
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, consequently, furthermore, however, if, look, may, so, thus, in addition, in contrast, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2030.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 394.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15228426396 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45527027702 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.89171292817 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.540609137056 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 639.0 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.5925792105 48.9658058833 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.411764706 100.406767564 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1764705882 20.6045352989 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.64705882353 5.45110844103 140% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.203435674528 0.236089414692 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0710847950124 0.076458572812 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0706791231922 0.0737576698707 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.152378395122 0.150856017488 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0454351515741 0.0645574589148 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 10.9000537634 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.78 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 86.8835125448 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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