Students of a university have a long break between university semesters; the university requires all students to do one of the following for one month during the break:1.Students must take a course on the subject that has no direct connection to their maj

To begin with, numerous students attend university aiming to be equipped for their future career. Although undergraduates learn many theoretical knowledge in universities, they are entirely ignorant of how these information and knowledge are applied in real world. Thus, having a occupation related to their major, students can not only enhance their academic performance, but also gain some practical experience and hence are prone to acquire a satisfactory job in future. My own experience is a fabulous example. When I was an undergraduate, I used to receive medium grades in every course related to my major. As a sophomore, one of my professors encouraged me to intern in his company. I accepted his offer, and after a while, to my surprise, I did perform better in almost all my courses, because I could readily figure out what my professors teach and I got hold of how that information is exercised in real world. Consequently, my resume looked great when I graduated, and afterward I found a suitable job in a prominent company with a decent salary. This example vividly illustrates that what an essential role volunteer job plays in students’ better performance on campus.

Moreover, cities special in developing country can use universities students help to improve their infrastructure. For instance, in my country Iran, university students, especially whom their major is engineer and art, help to improves cities appearance, rebuild, and design infrastructure with their supervisor during summer break. However, cities authority do some construction during year, but because Iran is one of the developing country, they do not have enough money to complete their entire projects. Consequently, students’ volunteer works help us to have better cities.

In conclusion, it is for all the aforementioned reasons; I firmly believe doing volunteer works is more beneficial for university students during their semester breaks. This is because it helps them to gain some experience and improve their performance in the class, and because it helps other citizen to have better place to live.

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Average: 7.6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 129, Rule ID: MANY_NN_U[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun knowledge seems to be uncountable; consider using: 'much theoretical knowledge', 'a good deal of theoretical knowledge'.
Suggestion: much theoretical knowledge; a good deal of theoretical knowledge
...e career. Although undergraduates learn many theoretical knowledge in universities, they are entirely igno...
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Line 1, column 207, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this information' or 'these informations'?
Suggestion: this information; these informations
...ties, they are entirely ignorant of how these information and knowledge are applied in real world...
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Line 1, column 279, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...are applied in real world. Thus, having a occupation related to their major, stud...
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Line 1, column 464, Rule ID: IN_PAST[1]
Message: Did you mean: 'in the future'?
Suggestion: in the future
...are prone to acquire a satisfactory job in future. My own experience is a fabulous exampl...
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Line 3, column 228, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'improve'.
Suggestion: improve
...heir major is engineer and art, help to improves cities appearance, rebuild, and design ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, hence, however, look, moreover, so, thus, while, for instance, in conclusion, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 52.1666666667 79% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1782.0 1977.66487455 90% => OK
No of words: 332.0 407.700716846 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.36746987952 4.8611393121 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.2685907696 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.14135688752 2.67179642975 118% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 212.727598566 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.581325301205 0.524837075471 111% => OK
syllable_count: 578.7 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.5704030486 48.9658058833 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.8 100.406767564 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1333333333 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.73333333333 5.45110844103 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.53405017921 66% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.236337228155 0.236089414692 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0793928662861 0.076458572812 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0736423539959 0.0737576698707 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.178562278451 0.150856017488 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.054342673683 0.0645574589148 84% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 11.7677419355 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 58.1214874552 70% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 10.1575268817 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.87 10.9000537634 127% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.15 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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