Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Young people today have no influence on the important decisions that determine the future of society as a whole.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Without the shadow of doubt, youngers have always played an important role in every society. They are the one who make the revolutions. As some people hold the view that Young people are not influencial; However, some others may take the opposite viewpoint and belive otherwise. I personnaly agree that young people have the most influence on the society. In other word, as far as I am concerned, they are the ones who make a society advance. Among myriads reasons which can support my ideas, I will delve int most conspicuous ones, which persuade me to put forward this perspective.
First and foremost, some of the most important parties and communities choose a young person as their leader since younger people have a better idea of the future and how to alter it in favor of the society. A young person has a more clear picture than olders who are used to a different way of life. For example, I live in Iran and here the minister of the education is a young person around thirty years old. He is full of innovative ways for education since he knows what it is that other juveniles of the country want. Since he became the minister, the whole educational system of Iran is canged and consequently more people have access to better education while not having to participate in old boring calsses.
The second reason one should take into account is that as the technology advances, with such a fast pace that older people can not keep up, causes to change the hierarchy of the society as we can see founders of the biggest companies are young people. Big companies can provide lots of vacancies and job opportunity in the country which is markedly valuable for every country. An instance can illustrate my point better. Google is the biggest company in the word with a networth which uncountable. This company was founded by a young person and prospered so fast that within ten years it accomodates five hundred thousands workers which is a lot. This company is so influential not only on the society of the United States of America but also the whole word since this company desicions is about other countries such as Africa too.
To wrap it up, all aforementioned reasons and examples lead us to the fact that based upon today's lifestyle younger are the ones who owns big companies and they are leaders of communities. Actually there are some other reasons and examples advocated the claim which is not mentioned above.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, consequently, first, however, if, may, second, so, while, for example, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2016.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 424.0 407.700716846 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.75471698113 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53775939005 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54158629823 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 212.727598566 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.52358490566 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 653.4 618.680645161 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.6117825655 48.9658058833 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.105263158 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3157894737 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.21052631579 5.45110844103 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.184110728452 0.236089414692 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0549410265276 0.076458572812 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0521551762449 0.0737576698707 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109228442003 0.150856017488 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0272698864192 0.0645574589148 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.57 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.08 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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