Do you agree or disagree?“It is more important to keep your old friends than it is to make new friends”

Deciding which friend people need is one of life’s more difficult choices. One may opt for keep your old friends, or make new friends. In my opinion, make new friends is more advantageous due to the fact that new friend offers more adventurous and enlarged life.

To begin with an adventurous life, basically human is a social life that need to have many friends, and if human has few friend, it is the boring life. Therefore, everyone needs to find new friends and take some time with them to make the life much better and more excited. For instance, if you love to play basketball, volleyball and painting, you have to need more friends who can enjoy all of these things with you. Therefore, find the new friends is better than have only old friend.

Secondly, this world has many people with many characteristics, so you need to enlarge your world by enlarge your friends. This way is very important for someone’s life. For example, if you grow up and want to be a renowned entrepreneur, you need to have more friends to support or encourage you. However, this does not mean that your old friend cannot help you, but if you have few friends, you will have few solutions to solve the problems too.

Finally, I think making new friends is more important than keeping the old one because if you only have your old friends in your life, you will never find more interested things in the world and your world will be smaller than the others.

Votes
Average: 6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 118, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun friend seems to be countable; consider using: 'few friends'.
Suggestion: few friends
... to have many friends, and if human has few friend, it is the boring life. Therefore, ever...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, for example, for instance, i think, in my opinion, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 30.0 43.0788530466 70% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 52.1666666667 44% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1202.0 1977.66487455 61% => OK
No of words: 259.0 407.700716846 64% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.64092664093 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.01166760082 4.48103885553 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46895423346 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 126.0 212.727598566 59% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.486486486486 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 357.3 618.680645161 58% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.3768811175 48.9658058833 101% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.166666667 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5833333333 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.75 5.45110844103 197% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.435816808867 0.236089414692 185% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.187471781669 0.076458572812 245% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0935217896843 0.0737576698707 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.315451848984 0.150856017488 209% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0752182563823 0.0645574589148 117% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.63 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.81 8.01818996416 85% => OK
difficult_words: 35.0 86.8835125448 40% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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