do you agree or disagree that in the past younger people rely on their parents to make decision for them, and today the are more able to make decision independently
Decisions that we make through our lifespan are very significant, because our lifestyle, convenience, achievements and ... are completely affected by our decisions. Some people believe that in past younger people was depended on their parents and they did make decisions for them. In contrast, today there are much more independence and decisions are made by the young people themselves. I support this idea that nowadays younger ones are better able to make decisions independently for some important reasons considered bellow.
First, because of the massive improvements in technology, social networks and other media has progressed. There for young people have broad access to whatever they want. They can easily and in a twinkle of an eye find answer to any type of question that they need. They can also browse so many point of views and get familiar to everything. Hence, parents have smaller role as a wise advisor. Media, specially, internet, has become the sage advisor and have more information. As you can see, not bad to say that children are more informed than their parents these days and they don't rely on their parents anymore. For instance, I wanted to decide about which university to attend, although my father is a university professor but he could not give enough information about the various universities in my country. Consequently, I started searching the universities on internet and I could easily acquire any information that I required with the help of internet and social media. This taught me that the world has progressed rapidly and there is many information rather than past so it's better to rely on updated information rather than limited information than our parents possess.
Secondly, in the past, children used to accept whatever that their parents told them, regardless of whether it's true or not. This happened because they were fostered in a way that respect their parents and accept their ideas, even if they don't seem really suitable. However, today the principals and values in the society have changed. As a result, younger people no more tend to accept what they are told and they prefer to carry out investigation about their decisions, rather than allow others, even their parents, decide for them. In fact, a kind of independence has been grown and widespread through young people. For example, my grandmother’s experience make it clear for me that how much they were dependent on their parents. She told me that she had seen her husband only twice before their marriage and everything had been managed precisely by their parent and they just accept what they were told. In comparison with my life today, I can understand that they were obedient.
In sum, because of the rapid exchange of plenty of data, in comparison with parent’s, infants tend to trust on online data rather than their parent’s. Moreover, due to the different and changed principals today, children do not consider themselves obliged to obey their parents and they are more independent.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, hence, however, if, moreover, really, second, secondly, so, for example, for instance, in contrast, in fact, kind of, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 75.0 43.0788530466 174% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2544.0 1977.66487455 129% => OK
No of words: 495.0 407.700716846 121% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13939393939 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71684168287 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77055084245 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 256.0 212.727598566 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.517171717172 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 791.1 618.680645161 128% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.9530194873 48.9658058833 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.76 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.44 5.45110844103 118% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.336527262387 0.236089414692 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0921096837007 0.076458572812 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.099754516326 0.0737576698707 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.224317761729 0.150856017488 149% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.144229738225 0.0645574589148 223% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 11.7677419355 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 10.9000537634 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 112.0 86.8835125448 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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