Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave.
From a general point of view, in the booming era of technology, adverted apparatus and equipment have dominated individuals life and determined their lifestyle. This fact can be applied to the industry of film making and television. Impressing effects of television and films on people, particularly youth, is one of the most controversial subjects often provoke many discussions. Some people keep endorsing the fact that TV programs and movies provides benefits for youth whereas others dismiss this idea. Personally, it is my firm conviction that such programs adversely affect younger people. In what fallows, I will thoroughly elucidate on what rationale my perspective is based on.
To commerce, Tv programs and movies waste a myriad of valuable time of young people. Nowadays, a lot of diverse movies and tv programs are being produced and so many broadcasting means have been presenting them. In this line of thought, each of such serial parts of movies lasts something between forty five minutes to even three hours which is considered a significant time. It is crystal clear that how precious the time is to young people in their most sensitive span of their life which be dedicated to learning, studying and working. Relatively, adolescence spend a noticeable of this valuable gift of time to keep tracking the movie series and serials that are wisely and deceptively produced based on the communities' interest and tendencies.
Another equally remarkable reason is that movies can indirectly impress the young group of people and give direction to their willing and behavior. To delineate, individuals' characteristic shapes in the initial years of life and youth is among the most period of life which incorporates in forming ones' character. Therefore, role model that teenage follow to determine their own behavior and personality become very important in this period. Point to the other side, artisans' behavior, character and even dialogues, which are not mostly moral and well-accepted, will exceedingly affect the youth. Take my sister's experience as an example. When she was young, a series were very celebrate during that tie which the artists talked with a special accent. Hardly I can remember a youth who did not imitate this ridiculous accent even in formal conversations. In fact, has been part of their normal dialect.
To put it in a nutshell, television and movies adversely affect youth character and behavior. This is not only owning to the fact that such movies, that are composed of often useless programs, waste their time, but also can they negatively shape their behavior.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: The adverb 'Hardly' is usually not used at the beginning of a sentence.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, therefore, well, whereas, in fact
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 35.0 43.0788530466 81% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2188.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 419.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 5.22195704057 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52432199235 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8321945415 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 239.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.570405727924 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 685.8 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.6662414945 48.9658058833 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.19047619 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.9523809524 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.47619047619 5.45110844103 45% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.112234377212 0.236089414692 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0322799689021 0.076458572812 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0316711137739 0.0737576698707 43% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0684580336198 0.150856017488 45% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0106541564175 0.0645574589148 17% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.21 8.01818996416 115% => OK
difficult_words: 123.0 86.8835125448 142% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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