Do you agree or disagree that people learn from things better from their fellow students or co workers than from those at higher level such as teachers or supervisors.
Recently there has been a ton of debates on how people choose to acquire knowledge. I personally believe that we tend to learn much better from our superiors or teachers.I feel this way for several reasons which I will explore in my body paragraphs.
First and foremost,absorbing information from teachers helps us to have a deep understanding, which in turn makes our life more easier.However, learning from our colleagues or fellow course mates provides us with superficial knowledge which might eventually truncate our life or rather complicate issues for us.My own experience is an intelligent example of this.Four month ago,I got a job as a sales manager with one of the notable pharmaceutical companies.So my main onus is to ensure that ninety per cent of our products are been sold out. So I took it upon myself to ask a colleague on how to meet up with my target.At that time she was putting me through i was so excited, because i felt i have gotten a myriad of information.So at the end of month, I submitted my monthly sales to the auditing department and i received a mail from them reading that my report contains errors and this will automatically made the company to receive query from the state government.In fact, this news went as far as getting to the managing director and this eventually led to my dismissal.If I had trained with a virtuoso in the field of marketing, or probably ask our superiors at work I wouldn't have gotten myself into this mess.For this reason, it is certainly clear to see why it is much beneficial to train with expert.
Furthermore,superiors or teachers are more dedicated to their work.To be more specific, they show a positive attitude towards discharging their duties.On the other hand, learning from colleagues doesn't come with diligence probably because of similarities in age and as a result, we tend to be insouciant carrying out our duties.For instance,my younger sister who is now a renowned apparel learnt about the nitty gritty of fashion while she was in school.So with this, she was able to gather a lot experience such that when she started her own fashion she is always frown at not being punctual.All this she taught her followers and this actually made them to succeed after training.
In light of the reasons mentioned, I believe that learning from teachers or superiors comes with convenience.This is because they provide us with detailed information, and because they show a positive attitude to work.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, first, furthermore, however, if, so, while, for instance, i feel, in fact, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 72.0 43.0788530466 167% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2066.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 418.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94258373206 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52162009685 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.07613456762 2.67179642975 115% => OK
Unique words: 238.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.569377990431 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 644.4 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 20.6003584229 29% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 69.0 20.1344086022 343% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 265.625937907 48.9658058833 542% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 344.333333333 100.406767564 343% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 69.6666666667 20.6045352989 338% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 19.1666666667 5.45110844103 352% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 31.0 5.5376344086 560% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.144826133801 0.236089414692 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0804372980206 0.076458572812 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0248391644496 0.0737576698707 34% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0979639537327 0.150856017488 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0118051085764 0.0645574589148 18% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 36.7 11.7677419355 312% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 9.9 58.1214874552 17% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 6.10430107527 213% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 29.0 10.1575268817 286% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 12.56 10.9000537634 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.8 8.01818996416 135% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 86.8835125448 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.5 10.002688172 195% => OK
gunning_fog: 29.6 10.0537634409 294% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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