Do you agree or disagree? The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict.
Nowadays, societies have their own rules that youth should obey them. A few og these rules are too strict and restrict the young individuals. Although some people agree the statement which young people have to follow the rules, I believe most of them are not necessary at least in my country, Iran. Youth must be relaxed and have welfare at their learning time. They should not have any unnecessary and unrelated issue when they are at the class and work in the laboratory. In what follows, I will substantiate my viewpoint.
Firstly, one of strict rules in Iran for youth is their type of wearing. The students at the university have to put on simple shirts and do not wear any T-shirts event though it is simple. For example, when I was a student at the Azad University being a type of private college in Iran, I went to laboratory in the summer. So, I had to wear a T-shirt. But, an employee working for policy section at university did not permit me entring to the campus because of my clothes. I changed my clothes after a debate, and he allowed me going to laboratory. This problem had been solved, but it leads me to a headack until evening. I could not work that day in the university. Therefore, if the employee permitted me to go to lab, it would not cause any disruption in my work.
Seecondly, another strict rules in Iran for young individuals is their relationship with other persons having different gender. I cannot go out with my girl friend due to religious rituals. For instance, I had an appointment with my Girl friend in a coffee shop two months ago, and we had to see each other just in the coffee shop. If a police saw us in the street, It would lead us to go police station, and after that, the police offer would establish a paper in their documents. Thus, it leads to some problems when I would want to be hired in a company. So, not only this rule stricts youth, but also it causes any problem to them.
To conclude, rules stricting the individuals are not necessary in the several circumstances. In my country, rules such as type of clothes and relationship have serious problems for young people.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 73, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun og seems to be countable; consider using: 'few '.
Suggestion: few
...wn rules that youth should obey them. A few og these rules are too strict and restrict...
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Line 2, column 148, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... to put on simple shirts and do not wear any T-shirts event though it is simple. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, so, therefore, thus, at least, for example, for instance, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1744.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 386.0 407.700716846 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.51813471503 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43248042346 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58758364953 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.515544041451 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 547.2 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.2963290347 48.9658058833 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 75.8260869565 100.406767564 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.7826086957 20.6045352989 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.17391304348 5.45110844103 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 13.0 4.88709677419 266% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.15391214881 0.236089414692 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0461815710721 0.076458572812 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0659493424722 0.0737576698707 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107204918887 0.150856017488 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0649389852475 0.0645574589148 101% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.2 11.7677419355 70% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 58.1214874552 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.64 10.9000537634 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.5 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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