In the past decade, as time marches on, the community, where people live, has drastically changed which results in updating and renovating new rules and regulations for such a sophisticated world. In this regard, some people think that the rules that government implement on the local community are liberal compared to the past time, while others hold a different opinion that the current rules are very strict and unnecessarily made by the government. From my perspective, the formal view contains more weight. I take the position on account for the following reasons.
The first reason that makes me hold the belief that every country has its own rules that people must follow for their betterment. To be more specific, in my country, adolescents have all freedom to decide their career options which gives them an opportunity to work in their preferred field. on the contrary, children were not allowed to take their own life decisions in the past, and as a result of that, it was difficult for them to pursue their higher education. My grandfather was a compelling example of this. While my grandfather wanted to study abroad in order to pursue a master’s degree, he was not allowed to go to another country at that time. Hence, he could not fulfill his dream of studying abroad. On the other side, nowadays, students can easily migrate to another country for their education purpose. Therefore, it is quite visible that rules are very liberal for young ones in current days.
Another equally noteworthy point is that social rules for young women were too hard to follow in earlier days than now. Moreover, women were forced to follow many restrictions compared to men in the past. However, the current scenario is different than that where women are given equal importance and respect as men in the country. To shed more light on this, women in past were not allowed to wear short dresses and go out with friends late at night. On top of that, despite the fact of being a smart student, they were not allowed to study higher education, whereas, in current days, the government has made many policies in a favor of women which would give all opportunities to young girls to meet their future dreams. Therefore, it is clearly visible that rules that youngsters follow today, are made for their benefit and are not strict.
All in all, after contemplating all remarks, I strongly believe that government rules for adults would make their future bright. This is because it gives flexibility to adolescents to make their own life decisions and helps young girls to pursue their dream which was not possible in previous days.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 324, Rule ID: PAST_TIME[1]
Message: Did you mean 'pastime'?
Suggestion: pastime
...l community are liberal compared to the past time, while others hold a different opinion ...
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Line 2, column 292, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: On
...unity to work in their preferred field. on the contrary, children were not allowed...
^^
Line 3, column 248, Rule ID: RATHER_THEN[2]
Message: Did you mean 'different 'from''? 'Different than' is often considered colloquial style.
Suggestion: from
...ever, the current scenario is different than that where women are given equal import...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, hence, however, if, moreover, so, therefore, whereas, while, as a result, on the contrary, on top of that
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.0286738351 190% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 52.1666666667 121% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2185.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 447.0 407.700716846 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.88814317673 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59808378696 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53674308663 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.507829977629 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 677.7 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 12.0 4.94265232975 243% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.729892014 48.9658058833 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.25 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.35 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.6 5.45110844103 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.123919973146 0.236089414692 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0430235396598 0.076458572812 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0531103559137 0.0737576698707 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0810640181446 0.150856017488 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0370716781718 0.0645574589148 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.38 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.05 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 86.8835125448 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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