do you agree or disagree with this sentence?to remain happy and optimistic when you fail is more important than achieving success.
The question is whether humans should remain happy and optimistic after every fail or not. Everyone in consideration to his private view point can maintain a specific direction toward this statement; however, I am inclined to affirm that having a positive perspective in any circumstance especially after making errors is one of the most striking features in breakthrough. I feel this way, which I explore them in following essay to empower my point of view:
To begin with, nobody could overlook this fact that mistakes play a crucial role in people's life. As the old saying goes ' the mistakes are the precious lessons of life that they can be learnt in the hard way.' If arriving to prosperity roads is convenient, human beings will not be able to perceive the meaning of success. During history, there have been a large number of well-know people who have experienced the fail in their life for several time; however such a frustrating condition could not make them disappointed. What was the secret of their success? All of them in their interviews expressed that having a positive spirit and a joyful mind helped them to pursue their goals. The epitome of this is the professor Samii- he is one of the most famous brain surgeons in the world-. He always highlights that despite of having a difficult life, a happy soul and positive view to future have encouraged him to overcome his hardships.
The second reason for my arguments lies the fact that pleasure and delight can assist living beings to improve their brain performance scientifically. Based on a study which has been done by a well-known institution, now it is believed that optimistic people can achieve their goals even with few attempts compared with pessimistic people who do efforts a lot. It goes without saying that when one accepts their abilities, spontaneously his self-esteem will boost up and such great thoughts can lead him to acquire the peaks of prosperity. It is noticeable that happiness allows brain to secrete more Dopamine- is a hormone cell in our brain- , and it goes without saying that dopamine plays in pivotal role in creating impetus and better concentration.
To sum up, this conclusion could be drawn that it is important not to be disappointed after every fail; however, more important is that human must attempt to maintain their spirit in a high level for access to prosperity.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, look, second, so, well, i feel, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1984.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 401.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94763092269 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47492842339 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75988494807 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.571072319202 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 607.5 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 60.9401892569 48.9658058833 124% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.266666667 100.406767564 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.7333333333 20.6045352989 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.6 5.45110844103 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.143897291252 0.236089414692 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0475643643039 0.076458572812 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0454682123262 0.0737576698707 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0910895932972 0.150856017488 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0179239554131 0.0645574589148 28% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 11.7677419355 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.73 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.59 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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