Do you agree or disagree with the statement that in the future, schools should no longer be necessary because children can obtain information from the Internet?
This question is hard to answer, because it depends on the conditions you are leaving in. People from the advanced and rich countries are able to buy laptops and phones for children, when poorer nations have school education as the only way to become intelligent. Nevertheless, I don't support the idea of eliminating schools, leaving young people with Internet only.
First and foremost, even if adolescents are able to study out of a school building, the youngest children will still need to be monitored and supervised by adults. Their minds and personalities are not formed yet and are very fragile, thereby, the free access to the internet can only damage them. I don't like the social media now, and I think that children nowadays are trying to become adults too early. Anyway, there are also a great deal of problems with the online education for teenagers. Not every student will be engaged in educational process, thus they could be left without any knowledge at all. In future, it can result in a scarcity of workforce.
Secondly, I experienced online education myself, and I'm not satisfied with its consequences. By having sedentary lifestyle, we are damaging our health. When going to school, children endure at least a minor physical activity. But when studing at home, no one controls it. Not everyone is willing to do sport, regrettably. Moreover, because of sitting in front of the phones and laptops constantly, children tend to have problems with their backs, which can cause problems with internal vitals in the future. Scool provides students with surveillans and force them to take sport lessons, which are beneficial for their health productivity.
Overall, In my consideration, shools are needed. However, they should be modernized and become more comfortable. Children spend a vast amount of time in schools, so they have to meet student's needs like a good canteen with healthy and nutritious food, storage space for heavy books or comfortable tables in classes.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, anyway, but, first, however, if, moreover, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, still, thus, at least, i think
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 43.0788530466 53% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1668.0 1977.66487455 84% => OK
No of words: 326.0 407.700716846 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.11656441718 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24917287072 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75365144105 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.638036809816 0.524837075471 122% => OK
syllable_count: 513.9 618.680645161 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 47.9616652092 48.9658058833 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.7894736842 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.1578947368 20.6045352989 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.05263157895 5.45110844103 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.217588307603 0.236089414692 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.055445374094 0.076458572812 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0299830940222 0.0737576698707 41% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120326025498 0.150856017488 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0260454619559 0.0645574589148 40% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.12 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.74 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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