First, the primary reason I don’t agree with the idea of adding class is that student might break down under environment containing too much stress. Nowadays, every parents has a high expectation for their offspring, but their willingness become their children’s burden because if they didn’t reach the score their parents expected, they had to face their parents’ disappointment. As a result, students has to work hard to not let their parents down, thus their pressure would accumulated day by day. When the pressure pressed on their heart reached a level, they might breakdown even caused depression. So adding class would not be a good idea for students considering their mental condition.
Also, the time saved from another courses could be used as a chance to enhance students’ personal interest. According to research, removing courses from school’s schedule actually would brought lots of benefits than forcing students took the class they have less interest on. A experiment done by Beijing No.2 Middle school, they canceled two class from the schedule for senior students so students have more time to focus on subject which they chose as career. Like someone who studied art used this period to visit gallery, in the end they came up with lots of paper about the artwork development. Besides, some computer guy spend their time on learning new computer language, and they completed design a new computer game. Such great work need a lot of effort and time, and the time spared by school would be really helpful for students who wants be skilled at their area. To sum up, not adding class give students time for achieving their internal goal.
The last point I want to mention is that it is not necessary for students to take the course in university because online course might work better. Nowadays, technology development provide chance to let everyone study more convenient and efficiently. Hundreds of website shot the video about various subject, and most of them is free for watching. Compared with the traditional class, online class saved the time for transporting to the classroom, it could be watched by every mobile tools. Students no longer need to leave the time for taking the bus or subway to take the class, instead they could learned the course during a waiting for movie start. So, taking online courses instead of face-to-face class would be a better choice for students, who really need more time.
Accumulating experience from society is the best way to enhance all aspect of one college student. Many university students attend internship in different companies and they improved their core skill from that. First, they exercised their interact ability with people because they don’t just had to talk with their co-workers, they also need to deal with their client.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 498, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'accumulate'
Suggestion: accumulate
...parents down, thus their pressure would accumulated day by day. When the pressure pressed o...
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Line 2, column 196, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'would' requires the base form of the verb: 'bring'
Suggestion: bring
...m school's schedule actually would brought lots of benefits than forcing students ...
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Line 2, column 286, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'An' instead of 'A' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: An
...k the class they have less interest on. A experiment done by Beijing No.2 Middle ...
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Line 3, column 601, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'could' requires the base form of the verb: 'learn'
Suggestion: learn
...y to take the class, instead they could learned the course during a waiting for movie s...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, besides, but, first, if, really, so, thus, as to, as a result, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2378.0 1977.66487455 120% => OK
No of words: 463.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.13606911447 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63868890866 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62359004419 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 259.0 212.727598566 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.55939524838 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 704.7 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.8211569006 48.9658058833 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.238095238 100.406767564 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0476190476 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.19047619048 5.45110844103 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.197032808954 0.236089414692 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.070042804939 0.076458572812 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0385665661769 0.0737576698707 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131891313517 0.150856017488 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0163009287788 0.0645574589148 25% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 11.7677419355 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 10.9000537634 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.51 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 86.8835125448 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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