Do you agree or disagree with the statement:
It it better to spend money on travelling and vacation than save money for the future.
In the contemporary era, people are offered multiple choices to enrich their daily life, unlike the past when living necessities were the the major concern. With regard to the utilization of money, some prefer to invest more on travelling and vacation, for the fact that they believe these activities play a critical role in living. While on the contrary, others hold the perspective that money should be saved for the future. For me, I would stand for the former opinion, to spend more money on those kinds of relaxation such as travelling. My reasons are as follows.
To begin with, spending money on travelling could brighten mood of people, which indicates that they are more willing to dedicate themselves to the next procedure of work or life. Nowadays people are suffering from an increasing number of mood disorders compared to the past. To ensure efficiency and effectiveness, recreation is considered to be necessary. There were a number of experiments conducted to prove that people could work with full energy after appropriate break. Our brain always requires a rest, instead of working continuously. For example, some conglomerates have the policy that the annual vacation would be extended based on the national regulations. This action aims to ensure that the workers have enthusiasm to work after recharging their batteries through a relatively long vacation.
Additionally, travelling and vacation could help people improve their health, which is definitely a hot issue of today’s society. The fast pace of daily life may bring the aftermath/ramification that people pay too little attention on their health. In the past, people used to ride a bicycle to school or work. However, as the technology develops rapidly, the main vehicle becomes automobile instead of walking or riding. This change means that people now have less hours of working out. For instance, there is a book which describes an author’s tour around the world with her husband. This couple aged over 60 are travelling independently without tour guide and much assistance from others. When being interviewed by the journalist about the secret of traveling around the world at an elder age, they responded that they kept travelling abroad at least twice a year from their 20s to make sure they could have a leisure time and keep fit.
Admittedly, saving money for the future also has some merits. Primarily, it could develop people’s frugal habits, to have a more comprehensive plan for the allocation of money in various intentions. However, sometimes plan is supposed to be adjusted according the the change of situation and money could be depreciated as time goes by. Another pros may be considered that the money saved for the future could be used by their off spring. Nevertheless, this may reduce the youngsters’ responsibilities to work hard independently.
To conclude, choosing to spend money on travelling and vacation is of greater significance. Firstly, it may improve people’s emotional feelings, which could contribute to the effectiveness of upcoming work or study. Secondly, it may help people attain good health.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, however, if, may, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, thus, while, at least, for example, for instance, such as, on the contrary, to begin with, with regard to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 74.0 52.1666666667 142% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2652.0 1977.66487455 134% => OK
No of words: 502.0 407.700716846 123% => OK
Chars per words: 5.2828685259 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7334296765 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.20835889027 2.67179642975 120% => OK
Unique words: 276.0 212.727598566 130% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.549800796813 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 824.4 618.680645161 133% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 44.3887051271 48.9658058833 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.7142857143 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.9285714286 20.6045352989 87% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.64285714286 5.45110844103 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.213680445913 0.236089414692 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0614871731683 0.076458572812 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0771672745947 0.0737576698707 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.136821549091 0.150856017488 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0605818485467 0.0645574589148 94% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.4 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.05 10.9000537634 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.76 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 136.0 86.8835125448 157% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.