do you agree or disagree with the statement?
rich people should allocate their wealth with poor people.
The more money a person has, the more should give away to charities.
An undeniable fact of today world is importance of money. Earning money is a global concern, especially in the developed country, and one and all do their best to become rich. One of the most severe dilemmas that everyone face is whether the rich should allocate a large amount of their budget to the poor. Although at first glance it seems so humanitarian activity and many people appreciate this line of thought, I strongly do not agree with what many people believe. I feel this way because of two reasons which would elaborate in following paragraphs.
To commence, one the most persuasive reasons is that, giving money to a charity cannot solve the poverty problem in the society. What I mean is that, imagine there is a poor family and they are supported by a rich man who allocates a considerable amount of money monthly for this family. As a result, neither parents who should manage that family nor children tries to change their situation. After a while they will get used to this situation and this circle including receiving money instead of working and earning money by the member of the poor family will be continued.
As equally as first reason which elaborated above is that, rich people have been working so hard to earning money so in this way they deserve to have more one. Take an example of one successful people in the world such as Dr. Nateqi. As much as I know and read his biography; this person has been trying hard since he was 10 years old. Although he had a trouble-childhood, he had never stop endeavor. He studied so hard and entered a high-ranked university in our country, had never stop studying and as a result, he graduated with a high mark. After thirty years that he has been working night and day, now life is appealing to him and he is one the richest people in our community. It is not fair to donate his money on account of being rich.Nevertheless, the rich one can help the poor as much as possible and pave the way for them.
Nonetheless, this was a story in a nutshell. There are, however, some other examples and reasons, challenging the above statements, which are not mentioned. To put it briefly, based on the aforementioned reasons, I strongly believe that the poverty should be solved deeply in society and not only donate money is not the best way, but also the poor themselves should change their situation and do not await others help.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, briefly, but, first, however, if, nevertheless, nonetheless, so, while, i feel, i mean, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 15.1003584229 146% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2034.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 438.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.64383561644 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57476223824 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62950271398 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.502283105023 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 642.6 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.1047901902 48.9658058833 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.7 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.7 5.45110844103 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.193716861156 0.236089414692 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0539443339147 0.076458572812 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0572893019872 0.0737576698707 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.108523278642 0.150856017488 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0715732039704 0.0645574589148 111% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 11.7677419355 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.63 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.67 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 86.8835125448 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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