Do you agree or disagree: young people should try many different jobs before that deicide the long term career of their life.
As the graduate day draws near, the anxiety to find a job spread among everyone. Due to the lack of practical experience and industry knowledge, many graduates will get lost in the countless job fairs. I am sure choosing a job for a tyro is anything but easy, because there are many things to consider except for the job itself. As for me, I would like to try several different jobs before settling down.
First and foremost, young graduates need considerable time to adapt to the society and trying different jobs can be helpful. Compared to the campus, the society impose more strict requirements on people, for which the young people need time to watch and learn. For example, if we make mistakes in school, we will be forgiven because the school proposes that we learn from our mistakes. But when we are in the society and undertaking critical responsibilities, we are supposed to follow the rules exactly and eliminate possible mistakes. This transformation may confuse some graduates, but if they try some different jobs, the can easily handle everything.
Moreover, trying some different jobs before settling down can help us fine the career that we have faith and enthusiasm for. Most graduates possess limited practical experience and only concentrate on their major when they are in college. However, a long-term career demands comprehensive evaluation of the industry and our own major. Luxun, a famous writer in China, was majored in medicine when he was in college. And he tried to be a doctor at the beginning. But later on, based on his own affection and the historical background, he chose to be a writer, because he wanted to weaken the slumber society through words. Therefore, to find something we love and a career we want to fight for with the whole lif, we need to try different jobs.
Last but not the least, even though some may have a clear picture of the future career, trying different jobs can help them find the favorable positions. In a same industry, some prefer to do the job concerning technology,design and testing, while some prefer to lead the group. Steve Jobs, for example, tried different positions before he become the CEO of Apple. And most positions can be regarded as different jobs, because he did totally distinct work on for different jobs. Finally, he diverted from the developer of Apple products to leader, specifically concentrating on marketing. Therefore, trying different jobs can also make find the suitable position.
In conclusion, I prefer to try different before choosing the long-term career, because adaptation requires time. In addition, locating my favorable job and positions demand multiple industrial experiences.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 361, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'several'.
Suggestion: several
... itself. As for me, I would like to try several different jobs before settling down. First and...
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Line 5, column 268, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'demand'?
Suggestion: demand
...in college. However, a long-term career demands comprehensive evaluation of the industr...
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Line 7, column 222, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , design
...efer to do the job concerning technology,design and testing, while some prefer to lead ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, thus, while, as for, except for, for example, in addition, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2251.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 444.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.06981981982 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5903493882 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83189980063 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.52027027027 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 704.7 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.51792114695 256% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 27.0323558701 48.9658058833 55% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 93.7916666667 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.91666666667 5.45110844103 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.248883362232 0.236089414692 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0766999195626 0.076458572812 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0622068919112 0.0737576698707 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.154487199126 0.150856017488 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0374129535145 0.0645574589148 58% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.23 8.01818996416 103% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 86.8835125448 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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