Do you agree or disagree: young people should try many different kinds of jobs or
career before they decide the long term career of their life.
Numerous young people are occupied with setting up interviews and sending out their resumes right after graduation. With the highly developed society, there are varieties of jobs waiting for talents. From my perspective, I am all for trying many kinds of career before decide the long term career.
First of all, for young people who have a scrap of nothing except their academic study in college, it is confusing to figure out what they truly want to do and what kind of job is the most suitable for them. People always believe that if you find a career you love, you will not have to work a day in your life. It is impossible to find the ideal career directly without experiencing plenty jobs. If you major in language, you are likely to regard English teacher as your life career, but once you become a teacher, you may realize that it is not the work you are expecting. At that time, the best approach is changing another job even more than once, maybe a translator or maybe build up a restaurant. It is inevitable to meet jobs that are not fit for you, so you are supposed to attempt to different jobs and then make decision about your future career.
Moreover, trying to do different jobs means accumulating different experience which benefits the process of finding career of life. They can utilize diversities experience to seek job and adapt new job better. Take my sister’s own experience for example, she used to be a nurse when she graduated from college. After a period, she was aware of the problem about this job. She did not deeply love this career. To be more specific, she could not feel a sense of achievement and gradually lost her enthusiasm. In order to not waste the youth time, she decided to resign and got the job as a computer programmer since she acquired relative knowledge in hospital. It is so quickly that she was addicted in programming and thanks to the experience as a nurse she has capacity to take care of other colleagues. It proves that trying different jobs can help people foster more skills and make full preparation for next job.
Furthermore, improving personal abilities through these work experiences is a convenient method for young people. It is practical business sense, since a person with different experiences can be expected to do many kinds of jobs. Current society is full of competition, you are supposed to make sure that you gain knowledge in more field. When companies hire employees, they look for applicants with diverse backgrounds and a range of experiences. There is no doubt that when employers decide between severe employees, comparing with the people only can spend English, they tend to hire the person who not only good at English but specialized in Japanese and are able to deal with technology situations. That is why my college teachers suggest us to take chances to join different career before finally make up our minds.
To put it in a nut shell, for figuring out their dream jobs, accumulating experience and acquiring competitive abilities, young people should try many different kinds of jobs or career before they decide the long term career of their life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 147, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...tive abilities, young people should try many different kinds of jobs or career before they dec...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, first, furthermore, if, look, may, moreover, so, then, thus, for example, kind of, no doubt, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 61.0 43.0788530466 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 76.0 52.1666666667 146% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2610.0 1977.66487455 132% => OK
No of words: 543.0 407.700716846 133% => OK
Chars per words: 4.80662983425 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.82725184711 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61780914457 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 275.0 212.727598566 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.506445672192 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 820.8 618.680645161 133% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 20.0 9.59856630824 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.1334219857 48.9658058833 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.4 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.72 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.76 5.45110844103 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.452510958698 0.236089414692 192% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.119473023556 0.076458572812 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.126698797842 0.0737576698707 172% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.300974953078 0.150856017488 200% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.143515048451 0.0645574589148 222% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.85 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 86.8835125448 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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