Do you agree or disagree?
Young people nowadays do not give enough time to helping their communities.
Even though many socialists and some of the people argue as if it is a general truth that young people are spending more and more time in the expanding relationship between each other and public socialites, I firmly recommend that in the modern world, children and young person tend to be alone by new technologies and government and managers don’t allow them be in communities. And believe it or not, we are evidence depressed generations that they don’t tend to share and participle in assemblies and gatherings. I will elaborate my idea with significant reasons in the following paragraph.
One of the meaningful reasons coming to my mind is that in new world, innovative methods and systems such as internet, computers and, of course game nets make youth people be more introverted and be more alone instead of spending their time in political and social discussions and problems. I parents want to witness a successful upcoming generation, they should restrict and limit childhood to less available in sophisticated and complex websites and tools, instead of more encourage and meeting different people and conferences. For example, in the past years, we did not have computer or access to internet, but I used to go the park and play with my friends, thus I am a socially person and give my time to improving and developing my country by helping poor people.
Another my remarkable reason is that government don’t accept young person to participate in problems and issues of community. Recently studies show that diplomatic and directors prefer to employ and let to adulthood and high experience people to in social. Youth people not only have to join in their communities and conventions, but also have to help and assistant to increasing groups and bands by inviting old people and talk to them about their social’ s problems.
As a result, one the basic of points mentioned above, I strongly agree with this statement that “young people nowadays do not give enough time to helping their communities”. Because I think if patents restrict them of new technologies and also government admire youth person, they will spend more time in helping and developing their communities beyond doubt.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: some
Even though many socialists and some of the people argue as if it is a general trut...
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...of course game nets make youth people be more introverted and be more alone inste...
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Suggestion: parent
... and social discussions and problems. I parents want to witness a successful upcoming g...
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Message: You used an adverb ('socially') instead an adjective, or a noun ('person') instead of another adjective.
...ark and play with my friends, thus I am a socially person and give my time to improving and devel...
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Suggestion:
...eloping their communities beyond doubt.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, thus, for example, i think, of course, such as, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 36.0 13.8261648746 260% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1870.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 365.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.12328767123 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37092360658 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95723697326 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.542465753425 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 579.6 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 20.6003584229 53% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 33.0 20.1344086022 164% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 82.0729367218 48.9658058833 168% => OK
Chars per sentence: 170.0 100.406767564 169% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.1818181818 20.6045352989 161% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.09090909091 5.45110844103 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.250759667089 0.236089414692 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0879191401167 0.076458572812 115% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.107387137796 0.0737576698707 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.16061034399 0.150856017488 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.101737797344 0.0645574589148 158% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.3 11.7677419355 164% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.98 58.1214874552 65% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 10.1575268817 159% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.01 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.08 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.5 10.002688172 195% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 10.0537634409 151% => OK
text_standard: 20.0 10.247311828 195% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.5 Out of 30
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