Do you prefer to work from home using computers or work in the office?
This topic leads me to think of my personal valuable experiences when I was a totally inexperienced intern in a software company. This results in different views on whether working from home using computers is better than working in the office. In my opinion, I would say that I prefer to work in the office because working in the office can significantly boost our working efficiency.
First of all, my view is that if we choose to work in the office, we will be able to solve some extremely tough problems more efficiently by actively asking for help from our colleagues. Furthermore, if I worked in the office, I could brainstorm with my colleagues and come up with some excellent ideas. For example, when I was a software intern, I usually bumped into a lot of arduous issues, like software environment settings or programming problems, which I couldn’t entirely resolve by myself. Fortunately, my colleagues came together and sincerely solved these difficult issues, and I could continue my work and improve my software skill from these beneficial experiences. In addition, I once worked on a project with some distinguished partners at that time, and we utilized this chance to exchange our thoughts in order to develop a useful product. Finally, we successfully completed our project, and this product perfectly proved its compelling advantages over other products, and it also bring a quite substantial profit for our company, and we got our promotion, too. By contrast, if we choose to work from home, we may not be capable of resolving these difficulties entirely.
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Second, I take the position that if we determine to work in the office, we can’t make use of some advanced equipment that only exists in the company, like high-speed hardware devices or the Internet. For example, I once chose to work from home using a lowly efficient computer, and I was dealing with an exceedingly urgent project, and I must manage to finish all the details of development and send them to my colleagues before the deadline. However, I came across a couple of technical issues, and I couldn’t accomplish this project on time finally because of this inefficient device. Afterward, I would definitely choose to finish these crucial projects in the office rather than at my home. In contrast, if we select to work in the office, we can always promptly solve our issues by using powerful digital devices.
To sum up, these are the two reasons why I prefer to work in the office, because working in the office can not only raise our working efficiency but also come up with more outstanding ideas.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'brings'?
Suggestion: brings
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, furthermore, however, if, may, second, so, for example, in addition, in contrast, first of all, in my opinion, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 67.0 43.0788530466 156% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 69.0 52.1666666667 132% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2184.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 441.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95238095238 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58257569496 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85299342356 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.514739229025 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 704.7 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 18.0 9.59856630824 188% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 8.0 1.86738351254 428% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 43.3991287355 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.5 100.406767564 136% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.5625 20.6045352989 134% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.1875 5.45110844103 169% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.324229643251 0.236089414692 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.12804587306 0.076458572812 167% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.120164294039 0.0737576698707 163% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.262186601726 0.150856017488 174% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.106823208698 0.0645574589148 165% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 11.7677419355 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 58.1214874552 76% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.73 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.09 8.01818996416 113% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 86.8835125448 132% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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